| Title: Chapter 9
| 09 Jun 2015 8:45 pm
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| Reviewer: Claris (Anonymous)
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This is an excellent story, which I'm really enjoying. The only thing I don't get is their speech. Draco and Neville would be speaking properly by age 5. I can see that neglect would cause delays in Harry's speech.
Author's Response: They do have proper speech, have you ever been around five year olds? They talk adorable, especially when their relaxed and let their guard down. This was addressed in the first few chapters, when their speech goes back to formal their obviously uncomfortable but even then they'll still have imperfect speech as their five. Harry's is worse foe obvious reasons, his is a delay theyres are like small lisps. I can't it explain it, unless you ve spent some time with the year group.
| Title: Chapter 9
| 09 Jun 2015 7:40 pm
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| Reviewer: Anna (Anonymous)
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Loooove it :D!! Thanks for all those cute Harry-Snape moments! I liked Remus fit over the father issue storywise too. I really enjoyed reading this. Have fun at the summer camp:) I look forward to much more!!
Author's Response: I'm so glad you enjoyed it. I figured it was something he would do, And I can see Sirius reacting even worse later on down the line, at least this way he'd have someone who would have bene their too. Neville and Remus will get their healing just as soon as Remus gets his head around the sotuation and Neville stop distancing himself.
| Title: Chapter 9
| 09 Jun 2015 6:48 pm
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| Reviewer: Phoenixsong (Anonymous)
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Yay! I was so happy for the update. I really enjoyed the chapter and hope that maybe Lupin and Neville will get to be happier / have more fun in future chapters. I want to see everyone get their happy ever after :). Looking forward to more updates in the fall.
Author's Response: So glad you're a reader, I'm working on the next chapter i have so many ideas for this story
| Title: Chapter 9
| 09 Jun 2015 6:45 pm
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| Reviewer: Phoenixsong (Anonymous)
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Yay! I was so happy for the update. I really enjoyed the chapter and hope that maybe Lupin and Neville will get to be happier / have more fun in future chapters. I want to see everyone get their happy ever after :). Looking forward to more updates in the fall.
| Title: Chapter 9
| 09 Jun 2015 5:56 pm
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| Reviewer: Anonymous (Anonymous)
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"Remus heard the child sigh and frowned as he watched the boy's expression. It hurt his own heart as he himself had often had a similar one on his face when he had been a child, longing. He said nothing as they watched Severus climb on the structure."
So Remus sees that Neville is unhappy, yet doesn't do anything?!? Come on Remus! Comfort the child! It seems to me like each child has their adult, but Remus is ignoring Neville a bit. I know Harry is his special cub, but Neville badly needs an adult to look out for him and love him.
Author's Response: They do, I have a storyline for all of them. Remus is stubborn, most Gryffindors are, that being said so is Neville. At the moment Neville wants Severus's affection that he has for Harry, whose to say Neville wouldn't have pushed him away if Remus tried to comfort him? Until Remus comes to terms with the whole situation they will both suffer, Neville moreso unfortunatly.
update soon! have fallen in love with characters and the storyline!!
like interact with remus with the boys.. like the outing to clothing store, ect..
like poppy taking care of the boys, while severus is preparing his manor for the boys to stay withe the winter holiday!!
the boys being deaged should be an interesting story!!
| Title: Chapter 8
| 29 Apr 2015 10:13 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Lovely chapter! I love how the boys are developing their own character!
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