| Title: Facade
| 26 May 2015 8:45 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an excellent chapter I like the twist that Harry doesn't know that others know.
Your story is different and I’m glad because after reading a few ”abused Harry” stories, they all start looking the same…
Firstly, you are so right in pointing out that the crucial thing is to see the abuse. We tend to make ourselves blind as we don’t want to be made aware of the evil in the world, especially not when children are involved. And I think it is very clever to have the magical glamours involved to illustrate that.
Secondly I really appreciate the way you make Mme Pomfrey react when she discovers the abuse and how she abstains from acting right away, for Harry’s own sake. That describes the dilemma from the point of view of medical professionals: your instinct is to act straight off and appease your own feelings of outrage, but the difficult thing is to actually see that it might not benefit the child right now. Instead you need to keep calm and figure out how to help that particular child, without making things worse… Mme Pomfrey does exactly that as she realises that Harry’s fame will be a complicating factor and that the gossip might hurt him just as much.
Lastly, I read in your response to one of the other reviews that you mean to say that Harry actually is not aware of his glamours and that he actually believes that everyone can see his bruises, but that they don’t care - is that so? It makes sense, because that must be how abused children experience reality. Although from reading your text, I did not get that - I thought that Harry made the glamours work intentionally and the magic just faltered at times when Snape saw through them. I thought that Harry was unsuspicious because he still thought that his glamours worked and kept people away. Maybe it should be made clearer in the text? It is more interesting this way, anyhow, with Harry applying glamours subconsciously.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review. I'm glad that you like the story and I've managed to make it different enough, you're right, most of them do tend to follow a formula.
It's great to see that you understand what I was going for with Madam Pomphrey. I've had a couple of people over on ff.net asking why she didn't just act straight away and I was worried that I hadn't shown her motivation clearly enough. I was trying to be more realistic, showing that it is actually a complex issue (also plot requirements...)
Harry doesn't realise about the glamours, he thinks everyone can see and just doesn't mention it, which is sort of what he wants. When he is at school he doesn't want to think about the Dursleys, and he doesn't want anyone else to either. He doesn't really consider his friends or teachers helping him as an actual possibility. I made a couple of comments along those lines in the first chapter, but maybe I need to make it a bit clearer; the next chapter is back to his point of view and should help clear up a few things.
If you note, the times when the glamour fails are when someone is expecting (subconsciously or not) to see injuries. This was one of the key ideas behind this fic.
| Title: Facade
| 24 May 2015 3:23 am
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| Reviewer: jolisgsd (Anonymous)
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Good story. Very well written.
I sincerely hope that Dumbles believes her and gets Harry away from the Dursleys.
I'm so glad that Snape has finally gotten past his hatred to see the truth. Let's just hope that Dumbledore takes Madame Pomfrey seriously.
I like the way you take a familiar plot, but turn it into your own--something unique.
| Title: Hallucination
| 21 Apr 2015 8:26 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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What a cliffie! Thank you an excellent chapter
| Title: Mirage
| 21 Apr 2015 8:22 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very clever and well written thank you
| Title: Reflection
| 21 Apr 2015 8:18 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good start to the story thank you.
The first chapter was very short, so not unpleasant but not brilliant either. This chapetr seems to have covered the whole scenario much better, and the glamours are a good way to show it all. Will be watching out for the next update.
Author's Response: I tried making the first chapter longer but it just didn't work. This third chapter is actually the first one I planned and wrote, and is the best at setting it out. Throughout the chapters, make sure you note when it is that people can/can't see through the glamours. It gives a clue as to how they work, and I'm not sure how much I'll spell it out in-story.
I love strictly canon Snape haha... hoping he stops ignoring the signs and actually takes some initiative with this. Typical Sev. Update soon!
Author's Response: He's still struggling with the idea, but is actually starting to take action. As you'll see next chapter, that is the meaning behind his the final instructions he gives Harry for Madam Pomfrey. I'll update the next chapter as soon as I can.
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