Hi, I've just discovered your story and liking it so far... The only thing I find a bit distracting is the amount of grammatical mistakes. If you don't have anybody available to review for you I would be happy to help. I hope you don't mind me saying that. Anyway, I will be waiting for you next instalment. Reyes.
Author's Response: Yes please. I need help with my English. It's perfectly fine for conversations but it's severely lacking when it comes to writing a novel.. So yes, help is always appreciated.
Awesome chapter, I hope you update soon! Thank you for the length of each chapter it's nice to have more than 1000 words every time, :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the reviews :)
I'm working on the sentences, it's not always easy when writing. I tend to mix up the punctuation rules for English and my native language.
I totally missed the death thing, but I have more of those mistakes. Someone pointed out that I have Ones instead of Once and Than instead of Then, it's easy to miss when you've written and read a chapter not that long ago. I'll go over each chapter again in a few weeks. So thanks for pointing that one out, won't overlook it again :).
And thank you for the comment about writing style and staying in character.. It's nice to hear, especially since most of the first few chapters were first drafts.. It's good to know I can do them right in one go, I'm having trouble with that in my original story.
Sorry about the Cliffhanger, I won't do it to often.. I uploaded this on fanfiction as well and I wanted followers :P
And last, I'm trying to keep my chapters between 6000 and 8000 words. I despise it when someone updates a chapter and I'm all happy and 2 minutes later I have to wait again..
Cliffhanger! I'm really enjoying the story I hope you keep it going for a long time, thank you so much for sharing!
Author's Response: Thank you :), and yeah I'm counting on it. This one is supposed to be a prequel to a story I have in mind, which will start two years after Voldemort is defeated.. So yeah, this will probably go on for a while longer. :)
Thank you so much for writing this and for sharing, I really like how you kept everybody in character, and cannot wait to see when Snape shows up!
Author's Response: Your welcome and no problem. I share for the reviews so thank you for leaving a comment. :)
I'm doing my best to keep them in character, but it's hard. Especially since I'm trying to change Harry and Snape, it just had done be done very, very carefully. Hopefully, you'll never even notice. :P
As for Snape, well, you've seen him by now. Bit late commenting on these reviews..
Hey there! I really enjoyed reading about Harry in this chapter, he's matured so much and it is really noticeable! I enjoyed his conversation with Kingsley, he's taking a stand and doing what he believes is right. This chapter makes me want to read more!
At the beginning of Snape's letter it says if you are reading this I must be must be death instead of saying dead. I'm really enjoying your writing style, it is better quality than what I've grown to expect from most fanfiction. I'm looking forward to reading about Malfoy's trial that should be really, really interesting!
Author's Response: Hi there, again. :P
The whole mature Harry is a bit of a flickering thing.. it's not there all the time. Though, he's getting much better when it comes to standing up for himself. Which is why he seems more mature. If I'm doing things right, you'll see that side of him more and more the longer the story goes on. I fixed Snape's letter, thanks for that one! :D
As for my writing style; why thank you, that's always nice to hear.
Hey there thank you for posting this story! I'm interested to see where this will go. You may want to separate the sentences little bit more, it's kind of hard to read. Heading off to read the next chapter now, thank you for sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing :)
I'll keep the whole dividing sentences in mind. The sentences in my native languages are usually longer so yeah, that's a bit of a stumbling block for me. Hope it'll be better in the following chapters. :D
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