I love the bonding between the Weasley family and Severus! Love how this story is going and I can't wait to see the outcome!
Interesting turn of events! I am happy that Harry is being properly taken care of, but I have to wonder about Severus and how he feels. He cares about Harry (that's obvious).
I love the Potion game that Severus created for Harry not to be bored in the hospital, and as Harry stated to trick Harry for liking Potions ;)
I love the bonding between Severus and Harry!
I love that Severus claimed to be Harry's father, and that Harry had a successful surgery. I was worried about Harry's health, especially since he was dehydrated and Aunt Petunia left him in the hospital without getting Harry help.
Poor Harry. Poor Vernon and Dudley trying to make Petunia see through her hatred. Poor Severus for having to deal with Petunia and her unkind words.
I hope Harry is alright!
I just wanted to correct Viet Nam as Vietnam, but, I love how the story progresses, learning about Severus and his travels. Especially how Severus helped Muggles who seemed lost in their journeys.
I have to wonder what exactly Lily told Severus about Petunia?
This is such a powerful start to the story and it's interesting to see how Uncle Vernon isn't as abusive as fanon makes him to be. It's different to see that the anger and rage comes from Aunt Petunia and how she has the power to hurt Harry and also manipulate Vernon to be a person that he really isn't.
Also, thank you for responding to my challenge!
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 07 Apr 2016 8:56 pm
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| Reviewer: GothDyke (Anonymous)
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Overall I really enjoyed reading this story, and I would be very happy if there would be a sequel.
What I liked:
-- the reversal of the Petunia-Vernon-dynamics because that is a new angle on the "Abusive Dursleys" theme
-- likewise I find it quite refreshing that Snape's past as a Death Eater and spy prevents him from getting the guardianship of Harry, but that he found a way to be near to Harry despite this obstacle.
-- that there is no definite answer to the question of Harry's parentage, but that Snape begins to fulfill the role of father in the way that counts (at least for now).
What I didn't like was the overly long and detailed description of Snape's travel history in chapter 2: Harry is in grave danger, and so the reader wants the help to arrive quickly and is anxious and impatient. A certain amount of suspense is to be expected, but to read paragraph after paragraph about Snape's past travels disrupts the pacing of the story (at least for me).
I definitely want to read a sequel, as I would eventually want to know if Snape *is* Harry's biological father and how the magical boost after the appendectomy affects Harry's magical abilities in the long run.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I’m glad that you liked the story and that you were drawn into it enough to get annoyed at chapter 2, which I agree, will put a halt to the train of events. Of course it was necessary to introduce the Snape of this story and give a picture of his prior life and his present state of mind, but it was probably too long and the examples too many. That’s what happens when Muse runs away with you and then you’re too enamoured in your own text to delete it… As a reader, I’m like you, by the way, as I’m not a fan of lengthy descriptions. I want to be taken along by the author and enjoy a book or a story, preferably in one long fluid experience :-)
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 22 Nov 2015 2:40 am
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| Reviewer: woodyt (Signed)
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Would love to read a sequel as I really did like this story but I hope you don't mind me making the suggestion that maybe you should try & get a beta. Thanks for sharing.
Author's Response: Thank you for liking the story, although this story WAS betaed... I guess it wouldn't hurt to have several betas, though :-) Living in another country, I don't have friends around who speak english, so betas are kind of hard to get hold of...
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 12 Nov 2015 7:26 am
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| Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
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I read this entire story last night! It took me a couple of hours and I was up until 5 AM, it was so good that I just hated to leave it! You can tell that you care about the characters and the quality of your writing, they were so well written. I really enjoyed how you took Vernon and looked into his relationship with Petunia, you made them more human (though no more likable, despicable the both of them!) Snape, even not being his snarky self, was enjoyable and believable, I loved him and how he worried about Harry and delighted to spend time with him, it was so sweet. You wrote out Harry's pain and emotional turmoil so well that I actually found myself crying! Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us, it was a pleasure to read! I hope you'll write more soon!
Author's Response: So very kind words, thank you! I'm particularly touched that you wrote you could tell I care about the characters, because I do very much. So glad you liked it!
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