| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 12 Nov 2015 7:26 am
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| Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
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I read this entire story last night! It took me a couple of hours and I was up until 5 AM, it was so good that I just hated to leave it! You can tell that you care about the characters and the quality of your writing, they were so well written. I really enjoyed how you took Vernon and looked into his relationship with Petunia, you made them more human (though no more likable, despicable the both of them!) Snape, even not being his snarky self, was enjoyable and believable, I loved him and how he worried about Harry and delighted to spend time with him, it was so sweet. You wrote out Harry's pain and emotional turmoil so well that I actually found myself crying! Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us, it was a pleasure to read! I hope you'll write more soon!
I very much enjoyed this story. I agree, it is the emotional bond that matters. Too many stories have Harry or Snape finding out s biological relationship, and instantly feeling completely different toward the other. I like that the relationship is not based only on blood, but also on the emotional bond that developed, and was hard won (with a little help from the appendicitis bond twist).
You asked about errors: a few that kept cropping up: in English, mounting is more frequently associated with horses, or with animals about to engage in procreation. It would never be used without a direct object in relationship with stairs (mount the stairs) and even that would be an unusual construct. Try "go upstairs" or "come upstairs", or "climbed the stairs". There were a few others but that was th one that stuck in mind.
Good writing - I'm trying to imagine writing something this good in German, which I was fluent in for many years - and I know I would fall short of this quality.
Thanks for writing. I hope that there is a sequel.
Such a unique take on Severus and Harry's relationship. I enjoyed this story and would like to read a sequel!
Aww this was lovely! :)
Author's Response: Thanks :-)
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 30 Sep 2015 4:46 am
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| Reviewer: Lauren (Anonymous)
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I could not stop reading this to review each chapter- yours me enthralled. I think this is one of the best written fan fictions I have read- you fleshed out the Dursely's and I loved the rationale for Petunia's bitterness and the dynamics between her and Vernon's relationship. I liked that although Vernon had some sympathy, he was true to character is trying to manipulate Harry to his own ends as per cannon. I also thought your Characterisation of Snape was spot on- I think a lot of authors overlook the fact that he is a young man in the series and would have the same anxieties most late twenties/early thirties muggles have. I also adored how you used something so mundane as the appendix to be linked to strongly to magic (I think JK would approve of that idea!). I would love a story about the Wizarding neighbourhood of Ottery St Catchepole- I can just imagine Snape and the Lovegoods butting heads!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much - that praise warmed my heart! I'm particularly glad that you liked "my" Snape, because he's a complicated character to portray and, yes, he is young and struggling so hard with himself.
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 23 Sep 2015 3:58 am
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| Reviewer: shadowienne (Anonymous)
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I truly enjoyed the unique slant you gave the entire approach to this story! The Dursleys were interestingly different, especially Vernon, and Snape's change due to the appendicitis bond proved amazing to the end. Thanks for this wonderful treat!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading and enjoying!
I WANT MORE!
... I skipped a few steps... oh, right! *clears throats*
This has been a thoroughly enjoyable read. I found myself completely drawn into the tale from the beginning. In fact, I had meant to stop and leave a few reviews throughout, but I was so eager to read what came next that it simply didn't happen. Thanks for sharing such an enjoyable tale!
That being said, I would absolutely love to see more at some point. I want to see more Snape and Harry and Weasley bonding, and how the changes of the summer go on to affect the coming school year and beyond. So, if you are considering a sequel, ever, you definitely have my interest!
Either way, this story is wonderful as it is, and I rather adore how you have crafted a common sickness into a magical rite of passage. Bravo.
Author's Response: Thanks! The fact that you were drawn into the story and eager to read on was the best praise you could give me. I'm glad it captured you :-) I have a rather precise idea of what I would like to do for a sequel - I'll just have to see when I will have time to start the actual writing... I intend to finish "my" other story, Spiral of trust, first.
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 02 Sep 2015 12:26 pm
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| Reviewer: Anne (Anonymous)
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Lovely story.
Author's Response: Thank you :-)
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 01 Sep 2015 6:31 pm
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| Reviewer: anna (Anonymous)
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Such a fantastic story!! Very well written, great plot and turns and super updating speed! Can't wait for more from you (what ab out a new chapter ob spiral ob trust ;)?!) it was a wonderful journey. Thanks for sharing:-) By the way I really liked Vernons visit and how yoh handled it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Anna! I will certainly return to Spiral of trust, now that this little summer fling is over and done with :-)
| Title: Chapter 12 A glimpse of truth
| 01 Sep 2015 5:18 pm
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| Reviewer: Twonky (Signed)
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I quite enjoyed your story. It was simply fabulous. I don't mind the ambiguous ending. The relationship is more important than the biology. Also, I really loved your whole explanation for the purpose of an appendix. You seem to know a lot about foster care, social services, and a ruptured appendix. You were quite realistic with all of them.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I did enjoy arranging the story in a setting that I am familiar with. Without being an expert in any of those fields that you mention, as I work in a hospital (and used to work in a paediatric ward) I do know what I'm talking about :-)
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