Now, for the important question, did Severus give permission for his memories to be wiped or did it happen against his will. And I find that usually 99% of the time is has to do with Dumbledore’s manipulations. At least there will be no flying cockroaches this time?
I cannot wait to read more!
| Title: Temptations
| 07 Mar 2018 10:30 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you for updating and not abandoning the story as I feared.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I don't plan on abandoning the story. Life just got a bit too busy, but now I'm trying to get back into things, so hopefully next chapter will come much sooner than this one.
I wonder what he's going to see there. I hope that it's only good memories of Lily.
Dumbledore!!!! Nooo!!!! Why did you have to put on that damned ring!!!!
Nice to see another enjoyable chapter. Good job!
| Title: Remind Me
| 15 Apr 2017 8:54 pm
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Made me smile and brought a lump to my throat, thank you
Whoop! Love it
Author's Response: Thank you! :)
| Title: Breaking Down Walls
| 22 Jan 2017 8:15 pm
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Very good chapter with a nice little twist at the end, thank you
Even if Kieren is annoying and needy and a pest I feel like Severus is ignoring him to the point of just being plain neglectful. It seems unrealistic to me and gives a lot of his mother's concerns merit. As a 'villain' his mother isn't all that bad considering her concerns for her son are so real. I could see her disliking Harry, and even trying to plot to get rid of him so he doesn't interfere(and I can see Kieren doing the same trying to get his parents back together), but the two don't seem that bad when you look at how Snape is treating Kieren. Also, if Clarise is such an annoyance, why hasn't Snape told her she's no longer welcome to visit... several chapters ago? Any adult I know, including me, would have said that. I wouldn't tolerate any visitor in my home putting down my children or family. Just my thoughts as I've been reading for what little they're worth. I want to see Snape treating Harry and Kieren equally. Snape will never teach Kieren to act appropriately without showing him the same love and affection, and giving him the same time as he does to Harry and not treating Kieren like a burden. Kieren and Clarice seem like flat characters. All their mystery is gone because they act the same scene after scene chapter after chapter. I've never seen a parent (one that knows both children and has lived with both for a while) treat one with such love and the other with such complete disdain. Parents usually try to include all children in an activity. Such as Harry's potions lessons... Kieren could have sat and watched or done his homework in the lab while Harry was learning. Or Snape could have had Kieren working on one potion while Harry works on another. Or if Snape was busy in his study with work and Kieren wanted attention, Snape could have given the kid five minutes of conversation and then invited him to sit quietly in the study with him and read while Severus worked. I'm not trying to be mean, I really do mean this to be constructive. I'm sorry if it seems bad or is unwanted.
Author's Response: I understand what you're saying, and I appreciate the constructive feedback. It wasn't my intention to give off the impression that Snape was neglecting Kieran. I'm sorry if it came off that way in this chapter. I do plan on editing and rewriting parts of the last few chapters. Thanks for the feedback.
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