I like this chapter and am happy for the update :)
| Title: Breaking Down Walls
| 16 Jan 2017 8:37 am
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| Reviewer: Mae19 (Anonymous)
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Great chapter. Can't wait to read the next one
Whew! A lot of emotional upheaval for Harry in this chapter. Some positive but mostly negative. Poor Kid. Vernon showing up in the Library during the nightmare was the thing that really hit me the most. He fledgling sense of safety being violated. Voldemort really is good at psychological games isn't he?
Snape isn't perfect by any means so I can't really criticize, but if I were him, I'd put a kibosh on the "burden" language that is being bandied about and letting the implication that Harry is imposing on the "family" stand. Especially when Harry is sitting right there! Sure, Snape was more focused on the person speaking but I sort of think he should be thinking more about how these words affect Harry, not on the demands of the shrew. Snape sort of lent agreement with her sentiments by not disavowing them. He was just arguing that he decided not to go. It was a battle of wills when he should have seen her attempts to hurt Harry with her words. Finally, the last thing that really set's Harry apart is referring to him as "the boy" and not by his name along with Snape being "sir" to Harry and "dad" to Kieran.
I'm actually surprised that harry has even considered extending trust towards Severus. It's sort of a good sign, but also sort of a bad sign. Harry must be more broken than we thought for that to happen so quickly. It "helps" that he's in crisis right now and Snape is the only one there. But forcing trust can sometimes backfire since a lot of the reasons that distrust was present are skipped over. But again, bonds forged in crisis can be very strong. Time will tell.
Also the absence of anger when thinking about how Snape treated him in the past vs now is a bit surprising. Both in Potions and Occulemency. In five years, he never taught Harry how to properly dice an ingredient? He didn't give Harry instructions on what to do or how to do Occulmency? If Harry wasn't so exhausted, I think he might have the thought "why didn't you give me this book before? Why didn't you teach me how to properly prepare ingredients before?" Harry doesn't deliberately ignore instructions in his schoolwork in canon so my personal conclusion is that he wasn't taught...on purpose.
Reading between the lines, Snape set Harry up for failure in both by literally not teaching him, then condemning him for his failure.
That Harry doesn't even have a second of anger over this makes me believe Harry is worse off than depicted.
But then again, it's been quite a while since I read the beginning of this story, so I'm probably forgetting quite a bit of the ups and downs that have already played out. Forgive me if I have and ignore my comments.
This is a great story! I love how you wrote the characters. Looking forward to updates.
When will you carry on with the story? Kieren and Draco are both spoilt brats! And what SS accused HP of being Does Kieren know that his grandfather was a muggle?
Time for the younger Snape to get a wake up call and a dose of reality!
I've never been a fan of Snape being Harry's father plot. This one is good though. I can't wait until your next update :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Next one is coming soon. :)
And the Dursley's 'training' strikes again. At least Harry's starting to think to tell Severus, even if he doesn't yet have the courage to actually go through with it. It's nice to see Harry learning to take solace in potions like his father does. I have no doubt that once Brat manages to wheedle his way into his own lessons, things will... become an accurate reflection of the classroom. On one hand, it will be fair to have -him- in the lab when Harry is finally allowed back onto the broom, but on the other hand, this is their bonding time. It's the time that Severus has with Harry that has to impact or influence from outside sources. Harry better keep a good eye on his broom when he's finally allowed to fly. Or there might be an incident that might require appropriating a new one.
| Title: Force of Habit
| 22 Oct 2016 5:59 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good chapter as they are not rushing into a father/son relationship but still hesitant towards each other thank you so much for updating.
| Title: Force of Habit
| 20 Oct 2016 6:28 pm
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| Reviewer: nnjjj (Signed)
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Great chapter! I love that you keep the angst going. Great job at keeping it realistic too with the relationship between Snape and Kieran. Even if he doesn't like the way he (or his mother) acts he's still his son and he has a certain responsibility.
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