Love this so far, really interested to see where you take it and if Snape stops being so awful to Harry regarding letting him see his mum :)
Oh, Harry I don't know if that's a great idea. I could almost see him ending up in slytherin due to his scheming, or just simply to annoy Snape. Great job on this chapter, and the story so far. I look forward to more.
I don't see Snape as 100% evil in your story. I mean, he's obviously not the nicest guy, but he does have some boundaries and I think there is still some good left in him in relation to Harry. I don't know of that is the direction you are taking your story, but I think with some external pressure they could come to see that deep down despite their fears and shortcomings they do trust and care for each other.
I think Harry does trust Snape somewhat (he still tells him when Aoife treats him bad, asks for food etc.) and he is the closest thing to a father that he has. Snape is not nice to Harry emotionally but perhaps that is somewhat due to fair of a James Potter clone or being rejected? Physically he is strict but he doesn't beat the crap out of him or anything like that. I think he would help/rescue/care for Harry should the situation be really dire.
I'd almost like to see Snape going away a few days and upon returning walking in on Aoife being abusive to Harry. Or Harry deciding to run away into a werewolf infested forest, or something similar frightening and knowing that he will be in major trouble but still trusting Snape enough to return or be found and seeking out comfort that Snape would hopefully return.
Ramblings aside, great job and I look forward to more.
Sure hope things start to look up! Great chapter!
| Title: The Bleak House
| 14 Sep 2016 10:25 am
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Very good chapter with wonderful descriptions thank you
| Title: Prologue
| 14 Sep 2016 7:58 am
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Thank you very unusual and a good start.
I feel very uneasy about this story... but i want to see what happened next, though I think it will be sad one...
Author's Response: It is in sharp contrast to some of my other stuff, absolutely. World of grey clouds is mainly meant to deal with Snape's good characteristics and how he may discover them further, this however, deals with his dark sides. The beginning here is meant to be my take on a world where Snape is not held responsible for his actions in the same way and gets what he wanted, thus the whole 'redemption' and guilt aspect isn't present here is the same way. But yeah, it is by no means pleasant. :)
oh, poor Harry. Living with his mother and Snape wasn't much better than living with the Dursleys.
| Title: The Bleak House
| 12 Sep 2016 7:22 pm
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Great story! Can't wait to see where this ends up and what challenges they face. I hope it will make them stronger.
You need to get that head of yours out of your ass Snape. I hope someone realizes what your doing and puts you in your place.
Please let the only way be up! That damn Aoife.
I can't wait for more.
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