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Reviews For Snape's Waifs
Title: Answer Honestly 27 Apr 2017 8:58 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Very emotional and well written thank you.

    Author's Response: And thank you for the R&R! I'll get more up as soon as I can.
Title: Answer Honestly 25 Apr 2017 7:53 pm
Reviewer: nnjjj (Signed) [Report This]
    I enjoyed reading this, and I look forward to more. It might have been a little predictable as to what would happen, but well-written and a pleasure to read.

    Author's Response: Yeah, it is a rather common trope and an obvious set up, but I'm confident that if nothing else, the rest of the story shall have my own twist. Thanks for the R&R. Glad you enjoyed this first chapter.
Title: Answer Honestly 25 Apr 2017 5:46 am
Reviewer: Draco-senpai (Signed) [Report This]
    Intriguing... Can't wait to read the next one! (~.^)

    Author's Response: I'm glad to hear it! I'll try not to keep you waiting too long. Thanks for the feedback!
Title: Answer Honestly 24 Apr 2017 9:37 pm
Reviewer: Ebbtide (Signed) [Report This]
    Perfect story is freaking perfect!!! More?!?

    Author's Response: Most definitely! I'll be sure to complete the next chapter as soon as I'm able. Thanks for the R&R. ^^
Title: Answer Honestly 24 Apr 2017 6:04 pm
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    AHHHHHH! Look at you go, you write fast! I read the other reviews because I'm 'that' person and have to say--I don't think the POV change was hard to notice at all. You put a page break, and used Snape's name in the first sentence in such a way that the reader should know Snape isn't talking about himself...I'm a fan of POV change though, all that potential character development, ;)

    Love how Snape designated authority to the upper levels!

    I'm not sure if you are a nitpicker like I am, but if you want constructive criticism, I might change this sentence:
    'Harry tried to keep his attention focused on writing somewhat legible notes but it was somewhat hard to do' just change the second somewhat to something else.

    Ahh, I see another POV change, maybe put a breaker there? Just to make it more obvious.

    Love his genuine concern for Harry, :) Very nice first chapter, I also like that he didn't just leave Harry in the Hospital Wing while the examination was going on, that would have been like washing his hands of him. Thank you for sharing!

    Author's Response:

    Oh, yeah. Totally missed the 'somewhats'. I may eventually add in another break somewhere in the mess of POV flopping, but I shall leave it for now. 

    And Snape does care, even if he is a bit emotionally constipated still. :P He's a slightly softer Snape than I usually stop with - the reasons for which shall be revealed as the story goes on. It was also important that he didn't just abandon Harry to the mediwitch, as you say.

    Thank you for the great feedback - I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter! <3 

Title: Answer Honestly 24 Apr 2017 2:14 pm
Reviewer: phoenixsong86 (Signed) [Report This]
    A great start! I'm very interested in meeting the rest of the waifs and to see the story continue to develop. Poor Harry!

    Author's Response: Thank you! Harry will be making their acquaintance in the next chapter, though it probably won't be till after that names get passed around. Thanks so much for the R&R!
Title: Answer Honestly 24 Apr 2017 1:03 pm
Reviewer: Lyzasnape (Signed) [Report This]
    Love this beginning!

    Author's Response: Thanks, Lyza! I'm glad you liked it. 
Title: Answer Honestly 24 Apr 2017 9:09 am
Reviewer: watercrystals (Signed) [Report This]
    I was so excited to read this! I love that Severus has two older students who keep an eye out for him, looking for those who might need to be brought to his attention. I did get a little confused by the POV mixtures in the Potions class onwards, but caught on.

    So many emotions! I was so absorbed in the Hospital Wing scene, and I really hope Severus can keep his promise! An interesting start, for sure. I'm looking forward to see how all this unfolds.

    Author's Response:

    Yay! Yeah, Sev's kids help him out, as they sometimes notice things that he misses from the head table and the front of a classroom. I apologize for the fluctuating POVs - I do know better than that - however, it felt important to have them, but I didn't want to break the scene as I felt that would push readers out of the story more. Hopefully it wasn't too, too confusing!

    Severus is definitely going to do his utmost! He's very protective of his kids, but more on that next chapter. Thanks for the feedback! 


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