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Reviews For Shadow and Moony's Child
Author's Response: Thanks for the advice. It still seems to be an issue. I copied it all from once place, but it the paragraphs were treated differently in different parts this time. I'll continue because it's mostly finished. I took a long time on this update because I had a dreadful kidney stone and work is CRAZY this time of year.
Author's Response: It gets mentioned later!
Author's Response: Thank you for your kind comments. You are pretty much right. There's not much action. At first, I was writing it for a Christmas challenge, so I just did all the Christmases. Then I added other important days.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Author's Response: Thanks. I like a sweet little Harry. I've already written most of it. I just have to write the last chapter.
Author's Response: Losing your mother is terrible. My mother died about 8 years ago and I miss her every day. (I'm old, by the way.)
Author's Response: Thanks. I have most of it written, so you shouldn't be in suspense for too long!
Author's Response: Thanks! It's mostly written, so I hope you like where it goes.
I like how you chose to write it as well, the chapter by chapter, watching Harry grow up slowly gets taxing to me, so this is a nice change. I thought it was odd in the beginning how Remus was like, 'Yo Severus, your the dad.' and nobody really questioned it, they just went along with it, 'Oh well, you can't have him anyway because he needs better protection and you need to stay a spy'. Perhaps build it up a little more? When Severus took Harry from the Dursley's, you mention hearing Harry sniffling in the cupboard, but you don't describe what he looks like when Snape opens the door, don't mention Harry frightened at the sight of him or anything. The reader only knows what you tell them. Original beginning, and I like the way you write Severus. I'd like to see more. Thanks for sharing! Author's Response: Hi, Thanks for the excellent advice. You are very write about the, "Yo! You're the dad." I'll have to go back and fix that. You're write about being more descriptive, too. I'll work on that.
Author's Response: Albus is troublesome, but in my version, he does mean well. He's misguided. I know I simplified the whole Death Eater thing, but I've always wanted them to be smart enough to abandon Voldemort. |
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