Potions and Snitches
Snape and Harry Gen Fanfiction Archive

Title: Ages 2-4 04 May 2017 2:24 pm
Reviewer: Baghi (Signed) [Report This]
    You might check the word wrap in either your browser or whatever word-pad you use to write in. P&S has a bad habit of making large spaces in certain chapters, and then deleting needed paragraph spaces in others. Also, this is an adorable story, and I'd love you to continue it ^^

    Author's Response: Thanks for the advice. It still seems to be an issue. I copied it all from once place, but it the paragraphs were treated differently in different parts this time. I'll continue because it's mostly finished. I took a long time on this update because I had a dreadful kidney stone and work is CRAZY this time of year.
Title: Ages 2-4 03 May 2017 11:47 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    Aww. I liked how Harry wanted to share his gifts. Though, just like Severus, I wondered how the Slytherin students would feel about toddler toys.

    Author's Response: It gets mentioned later!
Title: Age 1 03 May 2017 11:42 am
Reviewer: Livia Ethelind (Signed) [Report This]
    I love the chapter division! I'm totally assuming that it's going to be a relationship exploration mainly - thoughI base that on basically nothing and it like this kind of pacing for that. But it's the set up so I cannot say much yet but you did a good job at that and I'm looking forward to seeing more!

    Author's Response: Thank you for your kind comments.  You are pretty much right. There's not much action. At first, I was writing it for a Christmas challenge, so I just did all the Christmases. Then I added other important days.
Title: Age 1 30 Apr 2017 10:01 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Lovely start to the story thank you

    Author's Response: Thanks!
Title: Age 1 29 Apr 2017 9:38 pm
Reviewer: Nightshade sydneylover150 (Signed) [Report This]
    So sweet! Please write more.

    Author's Response: Thanks. I like a sweet little Harry. I've already written most of it. I just have to write the last chapter. 
Title: Age 1 28 Apr 2017 11:54 pm
Reviewer: lilyflower101 (Signed) [Report This]
    Poor Harry I don't know what i'm going to do when my mom dies. She's one of the best friends I could ever ask for.

    Author's Response: Losing your mother is terrible. My mother died about 8 years ago and I miss her every day. (I'm old, by the way.)
Title: Age 1 28 Apr 2017 11:03 pm
Reviewer: PhoenixMalfoy (Signed) [Report This]
    I really like this so far, im curious about how the story will go and what will happen :)

    Author's Response: Thanks. I have most of it written, so you shouldn't be in suspense for too long!
Title: Age 1 28 Apr 2017 6:29 am
Reviewer: Dream Painter (Signed) [Report This]
    A good start. Little Harry is so cute! I look forward to seeing where you take this.

    Author's Response: Thanks! It's mostly written, so I hope you like where it goes.
Title: Age 1 28 Apr 2017 3:45 am
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed) [Report This]
    This is a very interesting and different take on the 'Harry not raised by Dursley's situation.'

    I like how you chose to write it as well, the chapter by chapter, watching Harry grow up slowly gets taxing to me, so this is a nice change.

    I thought it was odd in the beginning how Remus was like, 'Yo Severus, your the dad.' and nobody really questioned it, they just went along with it, 'Oh well, you can't have him anyway because he needs better protection and you need to stay a spy'. Perhaps build it up a little more?

    When Severus took Harry from the Dursley's, you mention hearing Harry sniffling in the cupboard, but you don't describe what he looks like when Snape opens the door, don't mention Harry frightened at the sight of him or anything. The reader only knows what you tell them.

    Original beginning, and I like the way you write Severus. I'd like to see more. Thanks for sharing!

    Author's Response:

    Hi,

    Thanks for the excellent advice. You are very write about the, "Yo! You're the dad." I'll have to go back and fix that. You're write about being more descriptive, too. I'll work on that. 

Title: Age 1 27 Apr 2017 11:34 pm
Reviewer: bridgeportfox (Signed) [Report This]
    There were some interesting twists in your story. I like that Lucius and some of the other Death Eaters had enough of Voldemort and want out. Severus should have some allies with the disgruntled Death Eaters. Albus may be troublesome though. He certainly was stuck on the blood wards.

    Author's Response: Albus is troublesome, but in my version, he does mean well. He's misguided. I know I simplified the whole Death Eater thing, but I've always wanted them to be smart enough to abandon Voldemort.

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