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Reviews For Start of time
Author's Response: Thank you ;) next chapters are in their way.
1) It begins with an established relationship between Harry and Severus. You don't usually see a lot of those. It makes it something new. 2) Harry's counting. I haven't seen it before in other people's work. I like reading originality. (plus it made my want to wrap the child in a blanket.) 3) Harry wasn't magically cured from his insecurities. Because a lot of the "adoption" fics begin at, well, the beginning, I always feel like I'm left hanging at the end. How does their life look after all the events that took place? Everything's not a happily-ever-after, how could it be? But, yours had a good balance of the "beginning" (in chapter 2-how Harry came to being adopted by Severus) and the "aftermath", which should really be called the "continuation" (pretty much the rest of it). As for editing, here's a tip. "Dad" should be capitalized if it is used as a name or title, or anything like that. In Harry thinking process, any time he refers to Severus as "Dad", the "d" should be upper case. However, if Harry is referring to Severus as "his" dad, Dad is not capitalized. Examples: "Do you love me, Dad?" // "Harry wondered if his dad loved him." Hoped that tip helped you out. Thank you for a good read. You had me hanging for your last chapter. And I would love to see more... (~.^) Author's Response: wow! thank you for the brilliant review ;) it warmed my heart. i'm really glad that you liked the plot and character establishment, i always try to trive for originality in my works and it often make me feel self_conscious so it made me happy. i'm also glad that even though the story was done in three chapters it left you feeling satisfied. yes, i actually do plan to continue this fic, perhaps just until the baby's born, because i still feel the conflict and tension between Harry and Jan even though they talked. thank you for the tip and i will edit them as soon as i get the time ;) |
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