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SO. MANY. QUESTIONS!!! My poor little Hawwy. He needs lot of love, and maybe some chocolate. He had so good... BEFORE JANET SCREWED EVERYTHING UP. Thank you for another brilliant chapter. I was so excited to see in up! I wait with only slight impatience for your next one. (~.^) Author's Response: looks can be deceiving huh? are you sure she is Lily? or is she? a full explanation about the potters are on the next chapter and Aiden is also included, though i can tell you that Severus knew Lily before Hogwarts and they were good friends at some point. and if you think this is angst you are about to be blew off your feet cause i promise you the next chapter is epic! thank you so much for your brilliant support Draco, i am very pleased and flattered. but no worries i will update sooner than you think ;)
I have a theory about Janet, so here goes..... I have a feeling that maybe Janet is Lily in disguise? Or something? From what I have read, both woman have the same birthmark, which Harry also has, so this is the only explanation I can come up with. Perhaps Lily has repented and is trying to build a relationship with Harry again? I don't know, but I do know that you are a spectacular writer and I honestly can't wait for an update. Any idea when you might update again? I am sooo excited to see what happens next! Author's Response: THANK YOU! your review literally had me falling off my bed at 6 am in the morning! i'm not a fan of those stories either, it seems a little too unreal, and i always thought about what could happen next,your theory is really close but not there yet, you made the right link between the birthmarks though so stay tuned and again THANK YOU for your brilliant compliment Lym, it warmed my heart, don't worry i will update very soon. ;)
Author's Response: I'm very glad that you liked it Fmh ;) next chapter is only waiting for validation, so stay tuned my friend :)
Afraid, my darling, I'd be the courage you lack..." --Boat Song by JJ Heller Thought of this song when I was reading! It the sweetest song, look it up! I find myself more willing to take Harry's side of the argument, but I'm a little bias (and proud of it). It was a little sad the Janet was being insensitive about Harry being "abnormal". I wonder if it is because Harry's backstory hasn't been revealed to her. Is Severus holding that back because he thinks Harry should choose to let her know? Thank you for another chapter. You have so many others up, I can't imagine how you manage. Waiting for next time! (~.^) Author's Response: my goodness! i just listened to that song and wow... i actually wrote the next chapter with it, it was very sweet indeed, i recommend you listen to it again while reading the next chapter too! and i think you're on the right track concerning Harry, i never doubted his instincts(wink, wink) all of your questions are about to be revealed in the next chapters so stay tuned cause i'm writing like mad and i don't even know how! ;D
Author's Response: Thank you ;) next chapters are in their way.
1) It begins with an established relationship between Harry and Severus. You don't usually see a lot of those. It makes it something new. 2) Harry's counting. I haven't seen it before in other people's work. I like reading originality. (plus it made my want to wrap the child in a blanket.) 3) Harry wasn't magically cured from his insecurities. Because a lot of the "adoption" fics begin at, well, the beginning, I always feel like I'm left hanging at the end. How does their life look after all the events that took place? Everything's not a happily-ever-after, how could it be? But, yours had a good balance of the "beginning" (in chapter 2-how Harry came to being adopted by Severus) and the "aftermath", which should really be called the "continuation" (pretty much the rest of it). As for editing, here's a tip. "Dad" should be capitalized if it is used as a name or title, or anything like that. In Harry thinking process, any time he refers to Severus as "Dad", the "d" should be upper case. However, if Harry is referring to Severus as "his" dad, Dad is not capitalized. Examples: "Do you love me, Dad?" // "Harry wondered if his dad loved him." Hoped that tip helped you out. Thank you for a good read. You had me hanging for your last chapter. And I would love to see more... (~.^) Author's Response: wow! thank you for the brilliant review ;) it warmed my heart. i'm really glad that you liked the plot and character establishment, i always try to trive for originality in my works and it often make me feel self_conscious so it made me happy. i'm also glad that even though the story was done in three chapters it left you feeling satisfied. yes, i actually do plan to continue this fic, perhaps just until the baby's born, because i still feel the conflict and tension between Harry and Jan even though they talked. thank you for the tip and i will edit them as soon as i get the time ;)
Author's Response: Thank you for your wonderful review, I try to keep up the goo work ;)
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review, it's good to know that people enjoy reading this. I tried to keep Ron as canon as possible but with my own little twist of character. I think he's fascinating. Harry and Severus will certainly talk things out in the next chapter, but that doesn't Mena things will be sorted out that quickly. ;)
Author's Response: Awesome review ;)
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review ;) and I would be willing to continue this in one shots after the the third chapter, showing different stages in their lives. I believe there are so much angst or drama I can drain from this fic. |
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