| Title: Wow, You Need Like an Army of Threapists
| 06 Mar 2018 10:04 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a very good chapter. I love good dialogue like yours I agree it moves the story along and illuminates the action so much better than lengthy descriptions.
I'm not so sure about that Harry. You shouldn't trust them just because they have a place to sleep in and food to eat. They could have drugged or poisoned the food that they gave to you or hand the magicals with them place curses where you are going to sleep. They could be working for Voldemort and just be waiting for him.
| Title: Wow, You Need Like an Army of Threapists
| 01 Mar 2018 1:38 am
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| Reviewer: bootstring (Signed)
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Oh no, I have a bad feeling about this....
Something is gonna happen. There is something wrong. Triumphe, that can't be good. Something bad gonna happen.
On to other matters, please don't be offended, your story is brilliant. Extremely brilliaant, but this chapter gave away that you have only watched the movies and not read the books. I have no problem with that, of course, many people don't have the habit of reading. But, may I please request you to read the chapter, The Third Task in Harry Potter and the Goblet of Fire. That was one of the worst scenes in the movies, the task was so great in the book, just read it once, please... many things are shown.... Maybe it will spark your interest in reading all the books? There were many things left out in the movies. And did you know? Harry was put under the Cruciatus twice in the Graveyard. Along with many other astonishing facts that the movies weren't able to include.
I know I am rambling, but I want to spread the magic. Hope you will consider this, otherwise *shrugs* I can't force you to read them, and I am already quite happy with your story, so, I won't say this again.
Author's Response: Your criticism is welcome! (and phrased so nicely how could I refuse?). I have read the books, but granted it was a long time ago now, and more recently i have watched the movies so I'm guessing thats kinda coming across. I will definitely read that scene again and try to amend this scene, plus I might read them all again for a refresher (I really do love reading them!)
Anyway thank you for phrasing that so nicely and hopefully I can produce a story more true to the books than the movie. :)
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