Awwww, I loved it! Especially the “Always.” Well done!
Author's Response: Oh my god thank you so so much! I am over the moon that you liked it! It's only my first story, I will definitely continue writing :)
|Title: Felix Felicis
||04 Jan 2019 10:29 pm
|Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
Well done for your story, interesting idea I hope you continue writing.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I definitely will continue writing and uploading! :) Glad you liked it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it!
Pretty good for your first story - you described Harry's thoughts and blind running nicely. Not too many mistakes with the English either.
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I am so happy and surprised that people seem to like my story or at least don't find it absolutely horrible ;)
This is difficult to read, you need some more paragraph breaks.
Usually everytime there is a new speaker it should start its own paragraph.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for you review! :)