Hahaha! I love it. Of course Snape wouldn't rescue Harry right away. I loved his thoughts and actions - very in character. The descriptions are fantastic. I wonder though why Harry isn't coughing and sputtering after breathing in water. Other than that, I enjoyed this chapter immensely. Thanks for writing and posting!
Author's Response: Thank you!!! I’m glad you enjoyed this chapter! Oh good, I was worried that my version of snape wasn’t in character (dealing with a mer-snape is proving to be difficult in places ahahaha) oh I’m sorry! It is rather confusing at the moment with the constant jumping of POV with characters, hopefully that will simmer down soon enough now that Harry and snape have met up again. But Harry being seemingly fine when he wakes up will hopefully be explained in snapes POV in the next chapter! I am going somewhere with this story! trust me ahahaha. Thank you again for reading and reviewing!!
Sev finally gets his act together to save Harry and Harry is surprised by the “creature” that he screams. Awesome!
Author's Response: Thank you! I’m so glad you’re enjoying it so far!
So Harry goes in the water... great chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you!
| Title: Chapter One
| 21 Jul 2019 7:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good description of a merman and a very good confrontation I think you have got Draco and his goons down to a T. Thank you for updating
Author's Response: Thank you! Great to hear that my character writing is doing okay! I’m always afraid that I’m not doing them justice, but it’s a relief to hear that I’ve managed to write Draco decently and not too OTT. thank you for reviewing again!
Can't see why you didn't like this chapter. I thought it moved the story along nicely and, of course, it stopped at a most interesting moment!
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! I guess we are our own worst enemy when it comes to criticism sometimes, I’m still trying to develop a relationship with how I write. I’m glad you enjoyed this chapter, and thank you for taking a moment to review it!
Noooo! Poor Harry. Of course Draco probably doesn't know Harry can't swim. I really liked using Draco as the antagonist. It makes the scene similar to what Snape had to go through, being outnumbered, and bullied. Good development of plot and movement in the story line. I liked how Draco was a bully, but multidimensional. I picked up how it hinted where his bullying ways came from, parroting what another likely said to him...an adult probably his father to Draco, and to house elves. Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: Thank you! I’m glad my efforts to make a similar parallel between Harry and Snape’s experience with bullying by the lake didn’t go unnoticed- although I only noticed it myself as I was writing it! Yes! I always felt that a lot of Draco’s behaviour in the books/films was due to having learnt things from the people he grew up around. Thank you for reviewing! Hopefully a new chapter will be on the way soon!
| Title: Prologue
| 17 Jul 2019 7:19 pm
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Thank you a very promising start.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it!
Love it! Can't wait to see what Snape's merman form is like. Cool premise! Great writing so far. Great descriptions. Everyone is very much in character. Fabulous start.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was so nervous writing and posting this chapter thinking I hadn’t quite got the characters right yet (especially Snape) but thank you for the kind words! It’s really boosted my confidence and given me more motivation to continue writing this story. Thanks again for the lovely review!
Interesting start! I’d love to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you liked it!
Interesting start.
Author's Response: Thank you! Starting off a story is the hardest part for me, so it’s lovely to hear that you enjoyed the first chapter!
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