| Title: Chapter 4
| 29 Aug 2019 8:58 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very good reasoning about the Dursley’s behaviour and how Harry is aware of it being abnormal. I think the fact that she has the name Evans is a bit of a give away apart from the green eyes! Glad the mystery of the letter and rushing away is now cleared up!
Author's Response: Thank you! Yes, the clue is very obvious ... for those who know it is a story and coincidences are not likely to happen.
The bit with the letter was shamelessly stolen from a Jane Austen novel. ^^
Brilliant chapter! As soon as I saw the name Rose Evans I was like “hmmmm...interesting” ahaha! And when she began telling them that she was fostered I was just waiting with anticipation for the moment snape arrived! I’m really loving this. I’m interested to see how your character Rose will play a roll in this story- as well as towards the dynamics between Harry and snape!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Hey, Evans isn't that rare a name, it could be someone totally unrelated. ^^
Ahhh I love it. Rose must be related to Harry! Ahh! Great development. For an original character, I thought she was alright, a little bit insecure, maybe a little bit blank. I would of liked to know more details about her, some quirks in her appearance, a habit that made her seem more real. She kind of feels like a plot device so far, but an intriguing one. I hope to learn more about her. I loved the awkwardness of meeting Snape at the museum. I’m really enjoying this story so far and would love to know what happens next.
Author's Response: Oh no, poor Rose, I never wanted her to be a mere plot device. :( I hope you feel she's more rounded as a person in next chapter. Thanks for your comment!
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