I want to know if Lockhart actually went that letter, if he is as bad as Snape and Hermione think he is. So far, the story seems to be setting up for some sort of confrontation, where Snape can be hero. Harry’s thinking needs to be corrected too. Someone other than Hermione needs to look into what Harry thinks is normal. I think you should continue the story for a couple more chapters. End on some sort of resolution. All in all, I really like your characterizations. Very well done with the dialogue of the characters, every one seems to be in character and very reminiscent of their book versions from The Chamber of Secrets. Very well done.
Author's Response: Thank you! I always try to keep people in character. :)
And yeah, I have ideas for more plot. Some things will come to light about Lockhart.
Oh boy. Great start!! Poor Harry. I bet Hermione is just tricking him. I’m loving the set up to get Snape’s help.
Author's Response: Yes! Hermione realized he's not himself and doesn't want to trigger any aggression while she takes him to get help. And the love potion makes Harry very willing to believe that other people are in love. (It was never outright stated what love potions do, but seeing how Ron didn't think it the slightest bit strange to be in love with a girl he'd never met, and was happy to drink something Slughorn gave him to "make him braver" or whatever excuse they gave, I figured love potions make people very open to manipulation in general)
Good on Hermione, that was fast thinking.
Author's Response: Thank you! I was worried it might not be obvious enough that Hermione is just trying to get Harry to get help, glad it works! :)
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