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Reviews For Aim & Ignite
"Angry-Man?" Hahaha I love Ariel's first nickname for Snape. Snippy is even better hahahaha!!! I loved the casual use of the magic of emotions, having things vibrate, or float. Snape losing control like that was fun. Ariel is probably the only thing he really cares about. I'm not surprised he went ballistic. I'm glad Dumbledore apparated Snape away before he could accidentally hurt Ariel. I find it hilarious that Dumbledore took Snape upstairs to "gather his thoughts" and cool off. And then all the booms and thuds. XD LOL "Redecorating." I thought it was funny when Dumbledore suggested he see if Petunia's kitchen needed attention too. Poor Ariel thinking she's crazy though before they explained everything. And having an almost panic attack at going to Hogwarts and not having enough money. I love that Snape took her and reassured her in his own no-nonsense way. I admit this chapter was really fun to watch. There were a couple of tiny typos and such: Ariel couldn’t if he’d gone because he was still furious for being locked in Aunt Petunia’s room, or because he’d felt Dumbeldore too. WORD MISSING? Tell? The attic door slowly creaked upon OPEN the lock fell off with a snap, and Ariel was starting STARING Author's Response: Adjfdsfksjdf thank you so much! Chapter 2 was one of my FAVORITES to write because of Snape being so over the top, with Dumbledore being his usual charismatic self while putting out a fire, and Ariel being confused as HELL.
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