| Title: Chapter 13: unchartered
| 06 Feb 2023 3:54 pm
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| Reviewer: samatha (Signed)
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I don't know why. I just don't like Snape here very much.
great job on the conv between severus & ariel!! overall great story!
I actually went and reset my password in order to leave you a review :) You mentioned how reviews keep you going and I don't think this wonderful story is getting enough visibility, and I just wish (hope) for you to keep writing.
I've been searching for a good female Harry story, and I love your writing style, especially including both POVs, and how you intersperse Snape's & Ariel's subconscious forcing its way into their conscious deliberations (especially when they don't want to/can't admit to/are scared of the truth). Also, a believable, bitter, angry Snape who curses like a sailor, with an incredibly dark sense of humor and biting sarcasm, is exactly how I think he would be if we were ever allowed a peek into his mind. I'm glad he's not losing his edge immediately with Ariel, and while it's heartbreaking to see Ariel's hopes get raised and dashed repeatedly, her struggle for his affection and his resistance (and his emotional damage) is so believable and you express it so well, it tugs on my heartstrings.
I love this chapter. "The Darkness", as Ariel calls it, is an awesome device and I cannot wait to see where it leads. I'm guessing it is Voldemort's remaining soul piece floating around... though Dumbledore's conviction that he can't get into the school is making me doubt. The insidious nature of it, stalking, and talking, to an 11 year old.... creeptastic. Can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: Oh my god I totally thought I responded to this review and I didn't I FEEL SO BAD. Anyway, hi! Thank you for leaving this review, I opened it after a really crummy day at work and it made my whole afternoon, so thank you times 39483294. <3 <3
| Title: Chapter 13: unchartered
| 27 Jan 2021 10:56 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you an interesting chapter. I think Severus will need blood pressure tablets by Christmas if the level of stress continues to go up!
Love this new chapter! I check everyday for an update on this story and I am glad you found the time. Literally cannot wait to see where this is going...waiting for the turning point in the story. I absolutely loved them brewing together and cannot wait to hear severus’ internal denial, its endearing
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