I dropped my phone in excitment when I saw that there was a new chapter to your story! (Phone is fine, lol) AND WHAT A CHAPTER! Oh my...the feels! I've actually reread it three times now to take it all in. I wasn't expecting Ariel to hand over the letter...I wonder if she even expected to, herself? (There's that fire!) I hope we get to learn the significance of the phrase in the letter that basically made Snape's head explode (lol). I loved the bit with the diagnostic spell...Ariel's reaction was so sweet. I imagine it reminded Snape of Lily and her awe of magic when she first learned of it. I feel bad for the both of them right now. I don't know who I feel worse for. Ariel has had time to somewhat wrap her head around everything, but she did just seemingly experience rejection from Snape, and that's got to hurt. Snape has lived all these years with anger, misery, and regret, knowing his role in Lily's death. As if that wasn't bad enough, he now has to teach the product of the union between the woman he loved and his childhood enemy...only to startlingly learn that HE'S Ariel's father! I don't blame him for about passing out. I can't wait to see the fall-out of all of this! Thanks for another great chapter!
| Title: Chapter 7: for those below
| 05 Aug 2020 7:02 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Great chapter. I remember reading a spoof School inspection report before book 5 was published, It was very funny especially about the health and safety aspect and didn’t like the way the teachers described the inspectors as “they who must not be named”.
| Title: Chapter 7: for those below
| 04 Aug 2020 4:11 am
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| Reviewer: Vadimmom (Signed)
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I’ve caught up since I was a few chapters behind. You’ve done an excellent job portraying Snape as a bitter but passionate person. You can really feel his pain as well as his anger. Ariel’s curiosity and spunk also come across well.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! :) We love bitter Snape
Favorite chapter yet! There was just SO MUCH to it! I loved the insight into how Ariel and Snape are mentally/emotionally handling "the letter," particularly how Ariel is struggling with how she feels about Snape (I'm getting those "father" vibes). And poor Snape. He doesn't like not being "in the know," especially when it concerns him...ESPECIALLY when Lily's name is being thrown about with his. I strongly feel like Dumbledore does know the truth, but if that's the case, why's he holding back? What's the point? Hmmm...I can't imagine him wanting Snape to be frustrated/angry, so there's GOT to be something else going on with that. And Ron...his reaction to Ariel's hug-could there be more than just a friendship in the future, perhaps? The ending scene was intense. I was wondering when/how the Voldemort/pain-in-scar would come in to play, and it was well done. Perfect timing for Snape to yet again save Ariel and for them to have a discussion...she is on her way to detention, after all. Thanks for another great chapter, fellow teacher-friend!
Author's Response: Oh gosh, thank you so much, fellow teacher friend! This was such a chore of a chapter to write, I don't know why!! But I'm really happy to hear you enjoyed it so much! Ariel is definitely struggling with how to categorize Snape, and Snape is struggling with... feelings, which is very on brand. Dumbledore knows more than he's letting on, but we'll get to that later on. I don't think Dumbledore intentionally wants Severus to be blindsided, but let's be honest, there's a .02% chance Snape will take this well, no matter how the truth comes out.
Such a great chapter!I look forward to more of this story! I really enjoy the direction you’re taking with love protecting Ariel and her needing it. In canon, I understood why Snape had to stay aloof with Harry, for the sake of appearances, but it always bothered me. Especially with Voldemort not understanding love, friendship, I think snape didnt necessarily have to be so cruel. Therefore, I am really enjoying the direction you seem to be taking with allowing snape to have some kind of relationship with the girl who lived all while still keeping her safe.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Love is one of the things I really wanted to explore here. In canon, Harry has this incredible capacity to love, and love is Snape's only redeeming qualities. I absolutely love stories where Snape is thrust into the role of parent and is forced to confront those emotions, but I've very rarely seen it done with a girl he viewed to be primarily Lily's. I'm excited to keep exploring this relationship :)
| Title: Chapter 6: axe to grind
| 06 Jul 2020 7:19 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Great ending! I love the staff meeting, if that was what it was, and Severus’s musings very entertaining thank you
"You're killing me, Smalls!" Lol, I had to say that. I take it that Parvati and Lavender feel sorry for Ariel? It seems like they've picked up on "things" that Ariel hasn't noticed (or maybe just doesn't want to). I know not having pierced ears isn't indicative of not having a loving home, but it makes me wonder what else Pavarti and Lavender have noticed-and maybe even others? And Petunia ripping up Ariel's artwork...I'd see her doing that just because, but it does make me wonder what exactly was in the pictures. Flitwick dropping that tidbit about the letter! Plot-twist! Now we KNOW Snape HAS to get involved! He could've perhaps ignored the bit about Lily including him in her letter, but not this. Snape grabbing her wrist like that...I feel like he's taking her to Dumbledore, and who knows where that encounter will go! It also makes me wonder why Dumbledore is holding back on his knowledge about the truth of Ariel and Snape. Ugh. So many questions! Thanks for the update!
Author's Response: I think with Parvarti and Lavender, they're very much the stereotypical girly-girls, and Ariel confuses them because she doesn't know any of the latest trends or basics of being a normal 11 year old. I'm sure they've picked up on something not being quite right with Ariel, but they're kids, and assume she's just odd, but they do their best to include her. It just comes off the wrong way, sometimes. It's a maturity thing, too. As for Snape, you KNOW he eventually will have to get involved, or his head will explode. He can't handle anything, especially if all this Lily-stuff is being brought up after a decade. I feel bad, Snape really has no idea what he's in for!
| Title: Chapter 5: white blank page
| 27 Jun 2020 7:21 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you a wonderfully emotional chapter with a brilliant ending
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I got a p&s account Just to follow this. I love this fic so much and I'm so happy you updated!!!
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