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But who was Severus talking to? When he was hiding... it says his husband? But who is that and why weren't they seen by the rest of the Order? I wish there had been more details about that. Also one typo: Lily gratefully smiled and passed her son to Severus. "Thank you. He's been really fussy since we got here and won't start crying." Should be stop crying not start crying. :) Good start so far! |
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