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Title: Chapter 19 20 Aug 2021 5:39 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Dang! *I'd* have liked to hear "Elias'" pseudo-backstory from front to back: What parts of the truth might they have tried to incorporate and which out of whole cloth?
    Known: Sev & Elias' mother were not married. Sometime early in Lily's/fake mum's pregnancy, she was crucioed which already had an effect on Baby Snape. Elias has been tutored/homeschooled due to his medical issues. Mum died and Elias was sent to live with mum's relative; which says that Sev wasn't aware of Eli's existence and/or medical problems. Despite Eli's worsening condition, he was forced to work for non-magicals for his living and could not afford his potions. A sudden seizure at work caused Eli to be injured and he was sent to a mundane hospital where his history of abuse & neglect were uncovered and documented and Severus' paternity was noted and Sev was notified.

    Confusion/Unknown: When did Sev discover he had a child? Why did he not tell anyone if he did know? If his previous caregivers were abusing & neglecting him, why would they pay money for tutors/homeschooling and expensive medical treatment?

    This has all got to "gel" and form a cohesive and plausible story and since someone (Tonks) could easily get the records of Elias' hospital stay, what he told them that raised the red flags for the staff would be uncovered by any semi-literate investigator, so I *hope* that Sev's/Elias' "story" is a good one!

    I'm not so much concerned about Remus and Siri eventually accepting Elias --He is *still* *Lily's* child!-- but just how much "influence" the MOB, "the great 'Svengali'" has over them! I'm sure he's never told anyone his belief that Harry must be a "lamb to the slaughter" of Moldy to defeat him, but his ability to suck people in with his "caring Grandfather" bs --along with a few well-used compulsions-- is/has been enough to manipulate even someone as suspicious as Snape!
    Canon Fumbleduck's casual dismissal of Sev's "meetings" with Moldy should have alerted readers that not all was as it seemed with the MOB!

    I really loved Eli's ability to demonstrate just how far out of touch magicals are with the realities of the mundane world; even though he was "sundowning"! I laughed and applauded! Well done, Eli!
Title: Chapter 19 07 Apr 2021 12:21 am
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Nice chapter. Looking forward to finding out whether Lupin comes to recognize Elias on his own.
Title: Chapter 19 06 Apr 2021 8:00 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you, a lovely chapter with Severus and Remus having a civilised conversation. You portray the problems that Elias has in coping with the world so sensitively and well thank you.
Title: Chapter 19 06 Apr 2021 5:03 pm
Reviewer: Wolfwind (Signed) [Report This]
    Have I mentioned lately how much I love your Remus? That first paragraph about being stood up for job interviews was so perfect! I'm also really enjoying how you write Elias' struggles. And, of course, his making the wizards see sense about muggle studies was brilliantly done!

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