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Title: Chapter 37 14 Oct 2022 4:51 pm
Reviewer: cavehack (Signed) [Report This]
    Dumbledore is so coldly calculating. He gives me the chills. Remus in the Muggle world was hilarious! I’m looking forward to all the threads coming together!
Title: Chapter 37 21 Aug 2021 5:44 pm
Reviewer: LtsHrIt4ThBoys (Signed) [Report This]
    Glad to hear it's "coming together soon"👍 but here's my thing: If someone tells me that they believe they've found the cause of my child's/loved one's deteriorating condition and the catalyst is one that could re-occur at any time...

    If say, my child is found to have a lesion on his brain and the lesion has caused brain-damaging seizures at least twice, further exacerbating a pre-existing condition and can re-occur at any moment going forward, I'm going to demand that the "lesion" be immediately removed!
    Of course, I'm not from in many ways, a *backward*, Victorian-era society that's not only *not* privy to "mundane" medical advancements but would probably sneer at the suggestion due to the perception** that *we* are a primitive and "backward" society, but I do have to wonder what say, 70 rads of targeted radiation would do to old Voldy-splinter or even a sonic scalpel or laser surgery that was just beginning to be experimented with, in 1995?

    My 1st point being that the "soul container" is obviously *physically* inside the scar or it would *not* cause bruising and swelling and can, therefore, be dealt with *physically*; Severus just needs to think outside of the magical box!

    And my 2nd point is that I'm *not* going to consult with others, come to a conclusion about the cause of my loved one's life-threatening condition and go back to work! So NOT HAPPENING!

    When I came back home in 2019 after our brief separation, and I found out that Terry's Drs had found a *tumor* beneath his breast bone and that they'd *still* done nothing to follow up nor do further diagnostics(!) I was ENRAGED! I immediately got on the phone and burned up some ears and got the ball rolling!

    Turns out, they weren't terribly eager to DO *anything* because they gave Terry a "20% chance of /survival/" ("So, why should we do anything", was their thought process! Bastards!) But guess what? They KILLED the tumor in *six weeks*! Then they went on to kill his liver and then kill him! It almost feels like they were mad that someone forced them to do the *right* thing, so they retaliated! Not really, but sort of...

    I'm an action kind of person, so if there is an action that *can* be taken or *should* be taken, I want it done!

    **subtly encouraged by Dumbasf*** to promote his "Greater Good" agenda as once proposed during his planning with Grindelwald for ruling over the "muggles" for "[our] own good".

    I get the warning that it's going to maybe get worse than here, but only if someone lets slip to Dumbasf***!

    Thanks, darlin'! And thanks for letting me know about the reply feature being on the "fritz"!👍
    Appreciate ya!🤗
    MelJ
Title: Chapter 37 20 Jul 2021 7:39 pm
Reviewer: Fmh (Signed) [Report This]
    Thank you a lot of information here. First of all I wanted to scream at Dumbledore, he was only concerned about Harry as related to Voldemort, not for himself, how manipulative is that!
    I like how Tonks and Kingsley are going about their fact finding, I think if there is a showdown they may be on Harry’s and Severus’s side.
    I had to re-read the conversation between Hermione and Remus, but he, and you of course, were being clever I just hope it is not too much.
    Shannon and Severus are on the right lines but I’m worried about how Elias will react to the news. Finally I loved Remus in the library and I’m wondering if electricity might be the instrument to resolve the conflict and in particular, horcrux.
    Loved the chapter and the story, it is so well written and complex, thank you

    Author's Response:

    I'm glad you're enjoying this story! It's been an absolute joy to write.

    I want to scream every time I have to write Dumbledore in this. I much prefer writing him as a grandfatherly figure, but I needed him to be manipulative in this so I saw it as a challenge. Then all of the other plot lines started and now everything is a challenge, including writing him. But yeah, manipulative old man who we can hate on in this story.

    Tonks and Kingsley are literally just being good detectives. I find it funny to put them within a few steps of being on the right track at all times. They're getting there but they're running into the fact that the entire issue is so complicated and hidden that as they pull out one piece of evidence another bit of the story comes to light.

    The conversation between Remus and Hermione is resolved in the next chapter. Which is posted now!

    I can't talk much about any of the Shannon plot line right now because we are moving into it quickly. I will say this much: Elias's reaction to this is very much the reason this next arc is dubbed chaos. Oooo, ominous forshadowing lol!

Title: Chapter 37 16 Jul 2021 3:05 am
Reviewer: Shellie (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh my, I don't even know where to start! I do think poor Sirius needs told Harry is alive. He's not so much in Dumbledore's pocket anymore and I just feel so sorry for him! Looking forward to the conversation between Hermione and Ron after her talk with Remus!

    Just great, Elias was doing his usual eavesdropping. It was late though, so not sure how much he understood. I am probably seeing something that is not there but I am hoping the interest Shannon is taking in Remus might result in some of his medical issues being addressed.

    I apologize for inadvertently giving a spoiling last review, hope I didn't do it again! lol I would LOVE LOVE LOVE to see your original outline and if you do work on it as a side story - feel free to send more.

    Author's Response:

    I hope you'll find the next chapter an adequate one in regards to conversations between our various factions!

    It wasn't as late as you think, it was only lunch time which puts him in prime awareness time, unfortunately. I will say, as much as I would love for Shannon to help Remus, her primary focus is spell damage and lycanthropy is not a spell. It would make for a lovely interaction, but I don't think she would really want to take him on as a patient when she is actually quite busy dealing with an ever unfolding crisis in Belarus/Ukraine.

    Oh, no, you have no idea how much your inadvertent spoiler made me laugh when I saw it. And I know that you have absolutely no clue what it was as it is a simple linguistic mistake that I am 100% playing with in this story and plays very much into one of the main plotlines (not the secret one I keep alluding to, though). If you do end up doing it again, I may poke fun at it, but I am so so so confident that you don't know what you said and that no one else will pick up on it that I have been cackling literally since I saw it. If you do do it again, know that it only makes me laugh to see it.

    Hope you're enjoying Twitch btw. Like I said, radically different from this story in so many ways, but you can pick up on a lot of the similar elements between the stories. I don't really do "outlines" per se so I can't really send that, but I may post a chapter at the end of all of this that is just pure notes I made while writing this that has all of the references and some of the more comedic elements I put in the story for myself so I can enjoy it more as I read through it over and over and over again to try and keep the continuity there.

    As always, glad you enjoyed!

Title: Chapter 37 15 Jul 2021 5:00 pm
Reviewer: MellarkandArt (Signed) [Report This]
    Ready for the chaos!!! I wonder what Remus told Hermione

    Author's Response: 5 chapters until chaos completely breaks loose. And Remus told Hermione "no." That was it. But the implications....... Argh! *cackles maniacally*
Title: Chapter 37 15 Jul 2021 4:07 pm
Reviewer: Cayj (Signed) [Report This]
    First off I really like Shannon-- when she said what the he'll is going on at hogwarts I felt it in my soul! Lol 😆 and second, I know remus said "no" and that he wouldn't elaborate but was he saying no as in "no you guys aren't wrong"? Cause that would be a total violation of both snape and Elias trust. I mean I get they're his friends but is their comfort in knowing where harry is really worth his life? Cause if anybody finds our harry is Elias, there's like a 90% chance he'll die. Voldemort will be all to happy to do it with his vulnerable he is. Dumbledore would do anything to have control over harry again. I just don't think sating Hermione's should be on par with saving Elias life. Other notes, though, remus in a muggle library is so amusing. I keep trying to figure out this project for myself too but I just come up with "muggles and wizards all have electricity as a source but for wizards they can manipulate it as magic. Muggled manipulate it in other ways" but but I have to wonder why. I mean why fo they manipulate it differently? What makes them intrinsically different? And couldn't muggles really just be squib? Does anyone test them for a magical core or something? I mean how do they know there's no such thing as a completely non-magical person? Then snape killed me when he shot down the possibility of lily being from a squib line-- wouldve been much easier to handle than the poor the poor being a horcrux. Also, does Elias have hazel eyes now? Or was that another patient in the ward who'd been eavesdropping? If it's Elias, I hope he was in a lucid state or else he not going to take that well at all. So totally awesome a chapter

    Author's Response:

    I love writing Shannon. She's such a fun character and just does not give a shit. She will say it like it is and call you on your bullshit! And oh man has there been some bull at Hogwarts over these past few years!

    The Remus/Hermione conversation gets wrapped up in the next chapter, no worries. Or worries. Whatever you choose.

    Remus in the library will be a bit of a recurring thing here for a bit. Including a bit of Remus vs. an early 90's computer. That was fun to write. As for the project, all will be revealed in time. *mystery jazz hands*

    I imagined Snape having looked up Lily's heritage or used a potion or something back when they were in school and he was hearing all of the 'good' things about purebloods and the 'bad' things about muggleborns. It's very easy to vilify a group of people but say "oh but this one person is fine" and I can definitely see Snape trying his hardest to prove his best friend wasn't what the Slytherins were calling her.

    Yeah, it was Elias. His eyes darkened up a bit when the potion failed. And as it was lunch time, it puts him in prime 'lucid' territory. But lucid or not, I don't think he'd take finding out he has a fragment of Voldemort's soul in him well.

    Glad you enjoyed! Next chapter is up!


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