I’m interested in seeing how your story develops, and hope you’ll continue it!
This is different from any other story I’ve read in a long time, and I appreciate your creativity.
| Title: Chapter 3: Voldemort's Promise
| 23 Jan 2022 11:59 pm
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| Reviewer: cavehack (Signed)
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Interesting development at the end of the chapter
Interesting premise to your story!
| Title: Chapter 5: Bonding
| 13 May 2021 8:14 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you for updating. A good chapter, if a bit rushed
I like your writing style and enjoy reading your descriptions. Your story sounds interesting too. However, I find it confusing - I'm not sure why or how Harry is Merlin's heir and what the deal is with he and Voldemort being alive again.
I have a couple suggestions which might help:
1. Plan out the plotline and chapters of your story and identify any gaps.
2. Ask someone to proof-read your chapters before you post them. Even if they aren't professionals, they should be able to identify where things do and don't make sense.
I hope this helped, and I wish you all the best!
~HermioneGirl~
| Title: Chapter 4: Meeting
| 11 Apr 2021 8:07 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Thank you I’ll enjoy reading more of this story
| Title: Chapter 3: Voldemort's Promise
| 11 Apr 2021 8:02 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Ok, love this story but I hope we get a little back story as to why Dumbledore left it in his will that Harry was to die.
| Title: Chapter 2: Merlin's Heir
| 11 Apr 2021 7:56 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Interesting ideas thank you
| Title: Chapter 1: Chance
| 11 Apr 2021 7:49 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Interesting start to the story and well written thank you
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