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Reviews For Coming Back Home
Two points I’d like to make, Dumbledore’s portrait is in the office and I’m sure that he would have made a comment on the conversation Minerva and Harry have just had. Also I’m getting used to the conversation style you have but perhaps a little use of expressions might enhance it for the the reader. Please don’t think these are criticisms in any way they are only my, probably wrong, comments. Looking forward to the next chapter and thank you again Author's Response: Hi! Don't worry, I do appreciate criticism :) I think you are completely right btw. The Dumbledore thing is something that I thought about while planning the chapter, I just forgot to actually write it down... I wasn't sure if I should make it so he was away visiting another painting (I kinda wanted the moment to be only for McGonagall and Harry) or if he should be there and comment something. But then, when I was writing the chapter, I completely forgot hahah So thank you for pointing that out, I will add it whenever I can! And I am trying to improve on my writing. I feel more comfortable wrting about feelings or describing what is happening that the actual dialogue. (Also I should mention that I write the story in spanish and then transalte it to english, so some things might feel weird in a diferent language). But I did notice that some days the conversation feels more natural and flows better than others. Lately, I've been having a bit of trouble with that, so I apologise :( But overall, I'm happy you are enjoying the story and I'm thankful for your reviews and for giving me your thoughts. So yeah, thanks again for the review and have a good day! :D
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Im glad you liked it :)
Pd: Siento no escribirte en inglés, lo entiendo muy bien pero se me hace difícil expresarme u.u Author's Response: Muchas gracias por tus palabras. Me pone contenta que te guste la historia y como escribo :) Y en cuanto a no escribirme en inglés, ¡no te preocupes! Soy española jajaja Por cierto, si te interesa, en fanfiction.net tienes la historia en castellano ;) |
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