| Title: Chapter 5 A change of plans
| 24 Apr 2022 9:19 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Very dramatic, I loved the ending very clever thank you
| Title: Chapter 5 A change of plans
| 24 Apr 2022 12:21 am
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| Reviewer: cavehack (Signed)
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Very interesting. Events are moving quickly!
| Title: Ch 4 Then he shall tear it by its wings, but shall not sever it.
| 24 Apr 2022 12:14 am
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| Reviewer: cavehack (Signed)
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Clever plan! I haven’t seen that escape route used before.
The dialogue was challenging to follow, but I’m intrigued as to what happens next.
I really liked the end of the chapter. And thanks for the graphic.
A gripping start to your story!
Oooooooo…. What will happen next?
| Title: Ch 4 Then he shall tear it by its wings, but shall not sever it.
| 17 Apr 2022 8:56 pm
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| Reviewer: Fmh (Signed)
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Not sure if the crossed out sentences were meant to be deleted or are part of the story, but very effective thank you
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