Very nice
Author's Response: why, thank you.
Great first story! If Harry drank the potion would it really be permanent? I'm so glad that Snape was there to intervene. Your story seems to be missing any paragraph breaks. Did your copy have them? Thanks for writing and sharing!
Author's Response: I added a new chapter if you're interested. Also, as far as the paragraph breaks, I wrote this in a google doc, then pasted it here, but instead of the breaks, it had wide gaps like I pressed tab instead of Spacebar, so I just got rid of them, and cried internally. Also, the draught question is answered in the next chapter.
Thanks for posting your story! Poor Harry, that’s quite an experience.
Author's Response: It gets worse.
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