| Title: A New Opportunity
| 09 Mar 2023 3:57 pm
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| Reviewer: Iris (Signed)
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Really liked this story, hope you will continue with it!
I probably missed it somewhere but I was wondering where Sirius was in this story? I haven’t really missed him that much I just wondered where he’d gone😂
Love your other stories too! Hope you will continue some of the unfinished onesd84;a039;
Nice chapter given the content is mostly harry getting in trouble and upsetting people. Everyone on his side shows their support in little ways though. Its interesting how removed dumbledore is in this- he only has a couple of appearances.
I like Draco’s peripheral role in this
Nice chapter given the content is mostly harry getting in trouble and upsetting people. Everyone on his side shows their support in little ways though. Its interesting how removed dumbledore is in this- he only has a couple of appearances.
I like Draco’s peripheral role in this
The gathering is nice. I like the realisation thay isaac is just sarcastic. Interesting potions gift ideas too
To start, I wish we knew something about how arla got on at school- even if its only which house she got into!
I like the system in the takeaway, its a nice touch.
The way we see ron acting like ron even when its trhough snapes perspective is great.
And you handle snape finding out neatly too
The prefect details are good, people rarely go into that. I always wonder at this point if umbridge does have some sort of eavesdropping charm
Its a shame the way snape keeps trying to help and getting it wrong. Its an interesting way to introduce conflicts without harry breaking Snape’s rules
Adore the mushroom den. Umbridge is such a delightfully awful person. Neville is fantastic in this story, you really give him a chance to shine in his element
I love the ghost story for halloween. Soren and Edric are fun as well. You havent mentioned Sirius in this, Id have expected harry to have thought about him at some point, but it does mean we focus more on harry and snape. I guess harry hasnt seen sirius in a good while too
I love the ghost story for halloween. Soren and Edric are fun as well. You havent mentioned Sirius in this, Id have expected harry to have thought about him at some point, but it does mean we focus more on harry and snape. I guess harry hasnt seen sirius in a good while too
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