I love the ghost story for halloween. Soren and Edric are fun as well. You havent mentioned Sirius in this, Id have expected harry to have thought about him at some point, but it does mean we focus more on harry and snape. I guess harry hasnt seen sirius in a good while too
I love the ghost story for halloween. Soren and Edric are fun as well. You havent mentioned Sirius in this, Id have expected harry to have thought about him at some point, but it does mean we focus more on harry and snape. I guess harry hasnt seen sirius in a good while too
I love the mushroom project! I’m really excited to be getting to that part again. That last section with the gloves, and Deans bit at the end are really heartwarming
Eesh, good descriptions. Having umbridge as a pervading presence is good too, we can feel the frustration that she is around every corner
A good chapter, I love how Harry stays true to character through this. He knows there will be consequences from snape and umbridge, but still faces them in a very true to character way
Oh dear, Snapes half deliberate misinterpretations. I like the way you make it clear to the reader what snapes suspicions are, during harrys point of view based on what we know from snapes pov in other places. Its a clever technique
I love throughout this book that snape keeps warning Harry about other apprentices, and Harry just trundles along making friends with everyone. Again, love the foraging and teaching
Poor Harry, what a week. I think its quite funny that snape thinks harry + family could go away on holiday, when nobody knows when he’s going to be picked up. The fixation on the rat spleens is funny too
I like the haggling in this chapter, and I like each time you describe the mastery work with foraging or preparation of ingredients, its lovely world building
Your diagrams are great for showing the flat and street layout. Snape having this kind of flat shows that he is a much more well adjusted adult than he is in the books
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