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Reviews For Antiquity's Corollary
Other than that (the overindulgence of heaping guilt onto Snape for this crime - I know he has so many better ones to be guilty of) the plot is magnificent. And your Harry is perfectly in character. I'm not forgiving Dumbledore anytime soon, not until he apologizes and admits he was wrong instead of placing all the guilt on Snape. And that just adds to the depth of this story, because I am definitely emotionally engaged. So...thanks!
Yes! Back to the nice Dumbledore. Not that this is somehow different then the man was before... but it was all nice, no anger. I also liked how you pointed out Harry was mad, but he couldn't really pinpoint what he was mad at anymore. I get like that sometimes, when a lot of agrivating/crappy stuff happens. I've realized something else I like about your writing. Usually (maybe always, perhaps I should go back), your last line of the chapter is quite um, what's the word... good? powerful? striking? Even if the chapter is a cliffhanger, your last line leaves the chapter feeling complete. Author's Response: I typically won't post the chapter unless it feels complete. There are some that I have left off at a spot that doesn't quite seem right, if you ask me, but that was always for a reason. A chapter should be like a minnie story itself. Lol, it makes me laugh, because the later ones really are, at 30 pages in size 12 times new roman font!
Author's Response: Yeah, Dumbledore definitely needed to lay off- once he does, I think Harry and Severus will have an easier time of getting to know one another. Neither can be forced into this.
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