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Reviews For Antiquity's Corollary
Wow. So Snape had a warning, he knew Harry would find out... He had his chance... Well I like how Harry found out. It was cool that he entered Snape's mind and saw the man's memories. I feel bad that he had to see that Snape still "hated" him. Although I say "hated" with the little quote things, because I really don't think Snape hates him anymore. Despite his anger and whatnot, I don't think Snape really hates him. Am I wrong? I liked the ending of this chapter, I can't believe the Harry actually attacked a teacher. Good for him! AAAaaahhh I have to get back to the story! Author's Response: lol, you've read the story- you tell me? Are you wrong? Snape doesn't know how he feels about Harry at this point. He does dislike the boy he's come to know in the past 5 years- his origin really doesn't change that fact. However, this has forced Snape to re-examine some things, like how his hatred is founded and whether or not his assumptions about Harry are correct. He doesn't automatically like him... but he is now placed in circumstances that force him to get to know the boy.
Yes it really would seem that fate was wanting Harry to know his true identity. In fact, although people have been unwilling to tell the truth (Dumbledore first to Snape and now Snape to Harry), there is always a good compelling reason. Your story is great... What else to say... I thought it was interesting that you used Firenze in your story. I dunno if I've read a fanfic with him in it. I also liked that you took into consideration where he'd be able to go in the castle. His horse body wouldn't be climbing up into Trelawney's tower, nor would he fit up the stairs to Dumbledores office, would he? Author's Response: Well, the sad truth of the matter is that a lot of times, people just don't tell the truth unless pushed. I find the fact that the truth comes out in the end to be one of those funny little ironies of our world. Firenze seemed like the perfect character to explain this. Normally, Dumbledore would seem a good character to use... but in this situation, it seems unlikely that Harry would go to him. Who else was I going to use, Trelawney?
I figured something out. I just love your conversations. They're wonderful. Snape's little sarcastic speech about Harry needing to learn Occlumancy and then Harry matching the sarcasm. Oh and I liked how Harry refused Dumbledore. His line after Dumbledore's inner eye comment: "I don’t think that’s quite what you’re sensing.”-- that was cool. So now I'm really jealous of you, because your conversations are awesome. Oh and I loved how you had Snape slip into the fatherly roll. He finds out Harry's getting away with something he shouldn't and now he suddenly feels obligated to make things right. Lol. Well I suppose that would do it for Snape. Author's Response: Haha... you just figured this out... *snicker* Yeah, I think Dumbledore needed to be refused. I think Harry went about it all the wrong way, but I think it's great that he stood up for himself, you know? He needs to start taking control of his own life.
Wow that was a powerful last line. Never admitting that he wanted his life back... Poor Snape, he's always had such a sad life. (that's why he needs Harry...) I was right, Harry's reaction to being told to leave was really good. Since your latest update, I'd forgotten a lot of these earlier details, I'm really glad I'm reading this again. Snape and Dumbledore's arguements are really good. I can't place blame or anger against either of them. Both are angry at the other, and both regrett being angry. I like your mentions of their father/son relationship. Author's Response: I agree. If he and Harry can ever learn to truly get along, then it would be a really good thing for him. I remember writing these reactions being one of the greatest part of writing the story. I had read these stories for awhile, and I just never found a reaction that really seemed right... so I ended up just writing my own, you know? Actually, I couldn't find any stories that really seemed right... aside from maybe 3.
An enjoyable read. Author's Response: Thank you very much, I'm glad you enjoyed it ;)
Author's Response: No, they shouldn't be arguing right in front of Harry- I'll admit, being a teen, I find myself so uncomfortable when people argue over me in the same room... even my peers... it's just a bad situation, and as adults, they should know not to put him into it.
Author's Response: Oh thank you :) I liked Snape's reaction too. Obviously, or else I wouldn't have posted it... but yes, I'm glad you agree. He's not angry enough to completely cut off Dumbledore... but he's angry enough to threaten it, and he is angry enough to get worked up into a rage.
I love the potion that you came up with. It's really kind of funny how it needs to have the blood of his father... that must be a death eatter. So wonderful that they have both. I find that makes me smile! Oh and Snape's comments earlier in the chapter... His sarcasm- that was great too! About your question, to bring Lily back. That depends on how you do it. Like you said, the "never died" and "back from the dead" seems like and obvious no. But I bet your "in a sense" could really come out nicely. Perhaps your Lily's room, with the light magic could be of use (maybe you're heading in that direction already). Like they can restore the room and maybe some of her essance is saved, a bit of her spirit... and they can talk to her there, like as a ghost, but not a ghost...hhhmmm a memory. Something that couldn't leave the room... Author's Response: Well Snape was fitting the details to the situation- I'm working on the actual "textbook" information. You'll see later in the story (probably during their summer, where we will delve more into defeating Voldemort, and the potion and whatnot) what the exact details of the potion were. The text doesn't actually say "Death Eater". I think you can get a better idea of how it works when Hermione discusses it with Snape in a later chapter... I want to say it's the chapter called "In the Blood" but I could be wrong. On the Lily issue... I've decided from here on out, mum's the word, from me ;) This could mean I've gone with either decision, or that I've got two endings that I'm deciding between. Don't get excited, lol.
Okay, so I couldn't say away... For your questions... if you're still wondering. Your characterization has been great and your plot very original. I mean the Snape's really Harry's dad isn't original persay lol, but how you've gone about it is really interesting. You've really given Snape and Lily's past relationship a lot of depth, it seems real. And how Harry discovers their relationship is cool too. About the torture... I agree with you. The detail isn't really all that important, unless it gives the story significance. And once you've read about the torture, the images stick in your head... and I don't really need to many torture images-too sad. My thoughts on this chapter. Perhaps you should mention that Snape hated Harry because he thought Harry was the result of Lily affair with Jamesr. And he was a physical reminder of Lily's unfaithfullness and the reason for their relationship to end. I suppose you do, in one sentece- you mentioned Snape hated that Harry was a constant reminder of Lily chosing James, but that was after a couple of paragraphs describing reason's he hated Harry. And it skips on to hating the fact lily died for them... In my opinion, I think Snape's hatred would focus mostly on the fact Harry was the result of the affair and stem to the other things... do i make sense at all? Oh and I think one of the reasons Snape might start to reconsider his hatred towards Harry is because he found out the boy isn't the same baby... and that there was never an affair... Oh that leads me to what dumbledore told Snape... that Snape killed his own baby, that's so sad! AAHHH I can't wait to get to the part where Snape finds out the truth... Author's Response: I believe that fact (the one about how Snape hates Harry because of that) makes itself clear over the course of the story. As much as I would love to just come out and say all these things, sometimes I find that I have to stop myself and let the reader read into their actions a bit more. The reader should have to draw some of his or her own conclusion, and watch as the story's details either confirm or deny said conclusion. It's part of what makes a great story. I hint at it with that sentence, yes, but all these things are made clear over time I think. I actually have a ton of deleted segements of thought and scenes and whatnot on my other computer- probably about 20-30. I've cut a lot of those because I don't like to just hand the reader a ton of information. It makes it basically common... I like to make sure that when people find things out, it's a bit of reward... wouldn't want people to get too expectant!
I can see why this chapter would be difficult to write. You're changing Snape and Harry's character at this point, having each of them reconsider their opinion of the other. (unconciously it seems, it's not like they notice they are on a bit better terms). You balanced it out nicely too, still having Snape's snappy insults and whatnot, as well as Harry's little digs. Anyway, I should go work on my story... I dunno if you like all these reviews... constructive? Inspiring? (i doubt that)...um, tolerable? Eleven in one day might be a bit much.... lol I love reviews... do you feel the same way? Author's Response: Yes, it was difficult. Don't you hate those difficult things? Well... actually, they're great. A real challenge is wonderful. But still. Yeah, I like to think that I balance out the fluff with a decent bit of angst... ahem, lol, see chapter 36, eh? haha... yeah. Snape will always be Snape. Harry will always be Harry. These two facts definitely don't add up to constant happiness. I do like all these reviews! I do very much! Is there a person out there who doesn't like reviews? No, I definitely appreciate this- and I like that this is jogging my memory a bit. Sometimes it's hard to remember those past chapters... like, I know I wrote them, and I can remember facts.... but I don't remember the little details, or those little things that I loved writing. This is nice. |
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