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I'm Moriyah, a 28 year old lover of words who discovered fanfiction at 14...14 years ago, dear Lord.  Though I love writing, procrastintaion and a tendancy to get wrapped up in work means that several stories have been on hold for years. Getting back into it is so difficult when you've been away. I'm currectly an Advanced EMT, Firefighter and on a Covid Taskforce in West Virginia while in Paramedic Class. This has been the busiest year of my life, and reminded me how much I missed the quiet joy of sharing what you love with others, in particular, stories. 

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The Ghosts in the Park by Eihwaz Ehwaz starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 9]
Mired in guilt at failing to protect the Potter boy, Snape takes a week's leave from Hogwarts and ends up reminiscing at a park where he comes face to face with the ghosts of his past.

Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Snape is Depressed, Snape is Kind, Out of Character Snape
Tags: Child fic
Categories: Fic Fests > #21 Springfest 2016, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Misc > All written in Snape's POV
Rated: T - Warnings: Character Death, Neglect, Out of Character
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 11 Jul 2016 / 11 Jul 2016
Series: None - Challenges: You Look Like You've Seen a Ghost
Title: Chapter 1: The Ghosts in the Park 12 Jul 2016
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    Liked this rather original take Severus' life without a Harry to sort of 'guard'. It got really gruesome there for a moment with the 'dead' Harry, did something happen to the Dursley's? Prison? I wonder how they determined that it was the relatives fault that he died. I feel I missed something about that. Very nice fic, :) Thanks for sharing! I hope to see more when you have the time to write it.

    Author's Response: Hopefully the gruesome wasn't too offputting. I was considering raising the rating just for that bit. As for what happened...well there's a lot to that and I don't want to let out too many spoilers in case I decide to continue. I will say that the Dursley's are not in prison. There wasn't enough evidence to tie them to the body.

Harry Potter and the Golden Castle by myramcqueen starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 7]
A short poem. Fluff, AU Severitus.

Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving, Snape is Stern
Tags: Adoption, Child fic
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K - Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 29 Jul 2016 / 25 Jul 2016
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: Harry Potter and the Golden Castle 29 Jul 2016
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    Love your limerick/poem! Very cute and happy, thanks for sharing! Would love to read more from you! :D

Snape's Waifs by Dream Painter starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 18]
ABANDONED:- Five Slytherins, two Hufflepuffs, three Ravenclaws, and two Gryffindors including the Boy-Who-Lived – what do they have in common? Well, a snarky Potions Master, for one. After all, someone has to look out for abused kids at Hogwarts. Sometimes, it's each other.

Takes Place: 3rd Year - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Snape is Stern
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: 16+ - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect, Profanity, Romance/Slash, Self-harm
Chapters: 1 - Completed: No - Updated: 24 Apr 2017 / 24 Apr 2017
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: Answer Honestly 24 Apr 2017
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    AHHHHHH! Look at you go, you write fast! I read the other reviews because I'm 'that' person and have to say--I don't think the POV change was hard to notice at all. You put a page break, and used Snape's name in the first sentence in such a way that the reader should know Snape isn't talking about himself...I'm a fan of POV change though, all that potential character development, ;)

    Love how Snape designated authority to the upper levels!

    I'm not sure if you are a nitpicker like I am, but if you want constructive criticism, I might change this sentence:
    'Harry tried to keep his attention focused on writing somewhat legible notes but it was somewhat hard to do' just change the second somewhat to something else.

    Ahh, I see another POV change, maybe put a breaker there? Just to make it more obvious.

    Love his genuine concern for Harry, :) Very nice first chapter, I also like that he didn't just leave Harry in the Hospital Wing while the examination was going on, that would have been like washing his hands of him. Thank you for sharing!

    Author's Response:

    Oh, yeah. Totally missed the 'somewhats'. I may eventually add in another break somewhere in the mess of POV flopping, but I shall leave it for now. 

    And Snape does care, even if he is a bit emotionally constipated still. :P He's a slightly softer Snape than I usually stop with - the reasons for which shall be revealed as the story goes on. It was also important that he didn't just abandon Harry to the mediwitch, as you say.

    Thank you for the great feedback - I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter! <3 


Shadow and Moony's Child by Twonky starstarstarstarhalf-star [Reviews - 20]
Severus and Remus raise Harry after his parents are killed.

Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11), 1st Year - Snape flavour: Snape is Loving, Out of Character Snape, Overly-protective Snape
Tags: Child fic
Categories: Parental Snape > Biological Father Snape
Rated: K+ - Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking, Neglect, Out of Character
Chapters: 6 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 23 Aug 2017 / 26 Apr 2017
Series: None - Challenges: Moony & Sev's Child
Title: Chapter 1: Age 1 28 Apr 2017
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    This is a very interesting and different take on the 'Harry not raised by Dursley's situation.'

    I like how you chose to write it as well, the chapter by chapter, watching Harry grow up slowly gets taxing to me, so this is a nice change.

    I thought it was odd in the beginning how Remus was like, 'Yo Severus, your the dad.' and nobody really questioned it, they just went along with it, 'Oh well, you can't have him anyway because he needs better protection and you need to stay a spy'. Perhaps build it up a little more?

    When Severus took Harry from the Dursley's, you mention hearing Harry sniffling in the cupboard, but you don't describe what he looks like when Snape opens the door, don't mention Harry frightened at the sight of him or anything. The reader only knows what you tell them.

    Original beginning, and I like the way you write Severus. I'd like to see more. Thanks for sharing!

    Author's Response:

    Hi,

    Thanks for the excellent advice. You are very write about the, "Yo! You're the dad." I'll have to go back and fix that. You're write about being more descriptive, too. I'll work on that. 


Judas and the Messiah by AngelMoon Girl starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 13]
In which a young, grieving Severus Snape fends off Death Eaters and his own personal demons to get Harry Potter to safety, the cold Halloween night that his entire world fell apart.

Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Snape is Angry, Canon Snape, Snape Comforts, Snape is Depressed, Snape is Desperate, Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving
Tags: Alternate Universe, Baby fic, Child fic, Deaged!Harry, Injured!Harry, Kidnapped!Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K+ - Warnings: None
Chapters: 4 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 14 Feb 2018 / 05 May 2017
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 2: Part 2 of 4 06 May 2017
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    Oh my goodness! Where will he go, what will he do, ahh! Thank you for sharing!

Title: Chapter 1: Part 1 of 4 06 May 2017
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    Very interesting idea! Love it, and the title was a really cool idea too, dragged me in.

    I am curious about the Dark Mark in the sky though, as far as I know, it was only ever cast into the sky by the Death Eaters after they had wrecked havoc. I think it is odd that Voldemort would shoot it into the sky, (which alerts people to the presence of him or his followers) and THEN go kill Lily and James, normally they would do it after. So, I think it is weird not only because he did it before, but because I feel like Voldemort wanting to kill them was a secret...he wouldn't want people to know that he set out to kill the Potter's because of a BABY, what a laughing stock he would be if his Death Eaters found out, 'You were worried about a baby? Dude.'

    So, that's the only thing I have to wonder about. I'm looking forward to chapter two!

    Author's Response:

    Eeek, thank you so much. That is very high praise, especially coming from such a talented writer as yourself! I LOVE your stories! I will attempt to have the last part uploaded within the next few weeks. In answer to your question about the Dark Mark, I hesitated putting it in because of the reasons you listed here. But, I was trying to remain true to kissyushka's original drawing, which is the inspiration for this ficlet, and can be found on DeviantArt. See Story Notes for more details! Again - much love and gratitude for your kind words! Means a lot!


Undiscovered by Alexis18 starstarstarstarstar [Reviews - 75]
Dumbledore has requested Snape retrieve something valuable for the Order and stop Voldemort from getting his hands on it. Unfortunately Snape is also required to take Harry as they need a Parselmouth. Along the way, both learn more about each other and Snape's ideas and assumptions are proven incorrect.

Takes Place: 5th summer - Snape flavour: Snape is Angry, Canon Snape, Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Overly-protective Snape, Snape is Secretive
Tags: Injured!Harry, Kidnapped!Harry
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape, Teacher Snape > Unofficially teaching Snape
Rated: T - Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Bullying, Torture, Violence
Chapters: 17 - Completed: No - Updated: 27 Jan 2019 / 17 Jan 2018
Series: None - Challenges: None
Title: Chapter 1: The Circle of Idiots 23 Jan 2018
Reviewer: Scorpia (Signed)
    I was excited by the summary, but sad to see so many typos once I started reading. The very first sentence you use 'your' instead of 'you're' and then in the very next sentence used 'too' instead of 'to'.
    If you want readers to care about what you're writing, you must first care. This means editing, reading it through for mistakes so that people don't get sidetracked by them while trying to enjoy the story.

    Vacuum doesn't need to be capitalized unless it is the beginning of the sentence. Some lines of speech begin with " .... " while others begin with '...' this isn't interchangeable, you need to pick one.

    All sentences should begin with a capital letter. I liked the idea of the story, and when there aren't errors, the text seems well written. I'm just too easily distracted by the errors that are present.

    Author's Response: Thanks for the constructive criticism, I've gone back and edited the first chapter so it's much more readable. I agree I made quite a few spelling mistakes, mostly because I was excited to publish and should've taken more time to edit. In future chapters I will try correct my spelling and grammar much more before I publish :)


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