Ravenclaw!
Snape and Harry are locked in the Room of Requirement by Dumbledore. Harry's magic works, and Snape's doesn't. Will they kill each other? In response to the 72-Hour Challenge.
Takes Place: 6th summer
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Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Snape Equal Status to Harry > Comrades Snape and Harry, Snape Equal Status to Harry > Foes Snape and Harry
Membership status: Member
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Reviews by Quynce
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Alcohol Use, Violence
Chapters: 28 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 13 May 2011 / 30 Jun 2007
Series: None - Challenges: 72 Hour Challenge
Chapters: 28 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 13 May 2011 / 30 Jun 2007
Series: None - Challenges: 72 Hour Challenge
| Title: Chapter 24: Chapter 24 | 10 Jul 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- I love this story. I have probably read hundreds of mentoring fics, and I would put this in my top five. From the insanity that was Dumbledore's Room of Requirement (so much like those earlier tests he designed for Harry), to Snape and Harry's mistakes and successes, to the heightened (but not melodramatic) emotional tone-- it's amazing. The dialogue is wonderfully real and paired with great descriptions of gestures and body language-- it may seem simple when done right, but it's very, very difficult for most writers. I'm also surprised to find both Snape and Harry seem quite equally screwed up and both likable. Snape is often more violent, more unfair-- and yet somehow his lashing out seems wrong and yet very human and understandable (but I can't emphasize this enough, it's not condoned or excused). I look forward to the next chapter.
After Snape's visit to Surrey, Harry writes a thank-you letter that triggers an extended correspondence and a tentative friendship between the two of them.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Healer Snape, Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Age Difference Romance, Profanity, Romance/Het
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 02 Sep 2009 / 25 Aug 2007
Series: Chivalry - Challenges: None
Chapters: 17 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 02 Sep 2009 / 25 Aug 2007
Series: Chivalry - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 14: With Love, Part One | 31 Aug 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- I am so excited to see this update, and to know that this wonderful story will be finished. Thanks to Branwyn for persevering-- every chapter has been a treasure (and I mean that despite my strange lapse into cliché).
When Severus Snape finds a certain brat-who-lived out after curfew the year after Voldemort's return, it starts a chain of events that he wouldn't have imagined in his wildest dreams. Or nightmares.
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Torture
Chapters: 52 - Completed: No - Updated: 27 Oct 2011 / 29 Dec 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 52 - Completed: No - Updated: 27 Oct 2011 / 29 Dec 2007
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 51: But On My Soul | 01 Mar 2011 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- I lovet this story because it's so orignal. Most of the time, when other stories have been a long time between updates, I need to re-read just to recall what's going on. With this story, as soon as I start reading, everything about it just leaps to mind because this Snape (and his connnection to Moody, attitude toward Albus, etc., etc.) is so distinctive. I admit, though, that I often re-read the previous chapter just for fun.
A duel with Draco leads to drastic and permanent consequences for both Harry and Severus.
Takes Place: 6th Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe
Categories: Master Snape > Slave Harry
Takes Place: 6th Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe
Categories: Master Snape > Slave Harry
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Self-harm, Suicide Themes
Chapters: 79 - Completed: No - Updated: 17 Nov 2011 / 27 Jan 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 79 - Completed: No - Updated: 17 Nov 2011 / 27 Jan 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 48: Chapter 48 | 31 Jul 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- It's great to find out what happened to Draco. I am surprized how well he held up now that his backstory is clear. Maybe he hasn't been that well, he's just been keeping up apperences? I'm curious to see this next plot twist play out. Will Draco have a spell on him or not? I assume not... the magic would have to be quite dark.... Revenge seems rather awkward now, doesn't it? Draco has gone from spoiled heir to tortured orphan-- does he really need extra punishment?
Author's Response:
Thank you. I think some of Draco's ability to 'hold up' was because for a long time, he was simply numb and shut off. Also, he might well have taken opportunities to sneak off alone to grieve. It would be really hard for him to allow anyone to see him vulnerable, but I think that his control was only a thin veneer and with the confrontation with Dumbledore and Severus, it finally cracked.
| Title: Chapter 63: Chapter 63 | 06 May 2010 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- Delightfully awkard...I love it when an author does ambivalence well. I think it feels very right that Harry is holding a lot of feelings in and trying to take his lead from Lupin (who really isn't helping all that much). I'm eager to hear about Draco's problem as well.
Author's Response: Thank you! I tried to portray the reunion between Harry and Remus as awkward, with Harry not sure what to feel or expect. More about Draco and his troubles in the next chapter.
Summer after fourth year is finally over, and things are not as expected when Harry makes it back to the magical world. Badly broken and determined for it to stop, Harry turns to, surprisingly, a certain Potions Master, who in turn finds within himself, of all places, a heart still beating and waiting to love, and be loved in turn.
Takes Place: 5th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Deaging, Snape-meets-Dursleys, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 5th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Adoption, Alternate Universe, Deaging, Snape-meets-Dursleys, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys
Chapters: 35 - Completed: No - Updated: 27 May 2013 / 23 Sep 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
Chapters: 35 - Completed: No - Updated: 27 May 2013 / 23 Sep 2008
Series: None - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 11: Chapter 11 | 01 May 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- Why stay away from the politics? They're part of the story already (as you pointed out), I'm sure it would be an interesting addition to the plot.
Why does Lily need to be a pure blood? She can't be a powerful Muggleborn without some "old blood"?
Author's Response: She is (nods), but I needed a fourth chair, so she got it. ANd giving James two seats didn't sit well with me.
Sequel to "Harry's First Detention" - read that first, please!
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: None
Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Physical Punishment Spanking
Chapters: 64 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 21 Nov 2009 / 24 Sep 2008
Series: Harry's First Detention - Challenges: None
Chapters: 64 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 21 Nov 2009 / 24 Sep 2008
Series: Harry's First Detention - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 51: Chapter 51 | 26 Jun 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- The last couple chapters have been great-- I'm behind of reviewing because I've been out of town. I liked the Nagini POV last chapter-- and her sticky end in this one. It was nice to see that the kids are impulsive and tempted to do dangerous things, but not blindly jumping into the basilisk hole. The ending for this chapter was as sweet as candy floss.
I'm excited about the possibilities of having Lupin and Black in the castle-- especially when they have a more ambivalent relationship with Harry.
There is no such thing as black or white, only a rainbow of grey. Expansion of 'Fairytale'.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11), 1st summer before Hogwarts, 1st Year, 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11), 1st summer before Hogwarts, 1st Year, 6th summer - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Character Death, Neglect
Chapters: 8 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 18 May 2011 / 22 Nov 2008
Series: The Little Child To Lead Them - Challenges: None
Chapters: 8 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 18 May 2011 / 22 Nov 2008
Series: The Little Child To Lead Them - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 6: Water | 02 Jun 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- This is a really interesting series. The author's style is brief and poetic, which is very touching in an understated way.
The first story in the series functions as a prologue, but if this piece was revised, I would advise leaving it off. *Fairytale* is just heavy handed compared to *Rainbow of Grey.* Typically the purpose of a piece like that is to build up the fairytale metaphor, but right now it's just a summary. It has several excellent lines-- which the author acknowleges by using them as quotes in *Rainbow.* I think those lines should be included, but that they would do better as just lines from the narrator, not as quotes. The italicized quotes really bash the reader over the head with the message.
Despite my criticism above, I really think the author is very talented. I understand that when writing in a serial format, sometimes things just happen. I think the episodic style is very nice-- the only transition I found jarring was the sudden move into occulmency lessons-- I'm not sure now if the story follows cannon progression or if those lessons come earlier in this AU (it seems to be earlier...).
Author's Response:
Took so long to respond. Laziness. But I'm back in the funky writing groove, so I thought reading the reviews might help. Anyway. Thanks for your review, I'm really glad you like my writing style. Thank for your honesty. To be truthful, a lot of people seem to have preferred Fairytale - whether because of how it's written or whatever. It's interesting to hear the other side of that. As for the quotes, well, picking each quote for the beginning and end of a chapter is how I start writing - they're my base, even though sometimes the end quote may change if the chapter veers wildly off from where it was going originally.
The Occlumency lessons did happen as they did in the books - they're really where we swing far away from canon. It just seemed pointless writing each year, given that my brain really didn't want, I was dying to get to some actual plot and it really wasn't hugely important. If I ever revise this, I might go back and add in a couple of chapters there.
Before Harry arrives at Hogwarts, the faculty have a meeting and decide that Harry will need a mentor to help him adjust, keep him out of trouble, and make protecting him easier. They decide that this person should the Head of the House into which Harry is sorted, presumably Minerva McGonagall. But things, of course, don't turn out as planned, and Harry is harder to deal with than anyone expected. Nobody asked him if he wanted a mentor, after all...
NOTE: This story has a prologue. It is not necessary to the plot of the story, but if you wish to read it, it is called(predictably enough) 'Prologue to Life as Dictated by a Talking Hat'
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
NOTE: This story has a prologue. It is not necessary to the plot of the story, but if you wish to read it, it is called(predictably enough) 'Prologue to Life as Dictated by a Talking Hat'
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: None
Tags: Alternate Universe, Slytherin!Harry, SuperPower! Harry
Categories: Teacher Snape > Trusted Mentor Snape, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Profanity
Chapters: 35 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 24 Jul 2010 / 15 Mar 2009
Series: Life as Dictated by a Talking Hat - Challenges: None
Chapters: 35 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 24 Jul 2010 / 15 Mar 2009
Series: Life as Dictated by a Talking Hat - Challenges: None
| Title: Chapter 7: World War II - part 1 | 29 Apr 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- This genre-- Harry is a Slyterin AU-- doesn't have immediate appeal for me, but I'm really enjoying this story. This Snape seems particularly intelligent and observant, which I love. He's also calculating and manipulative, but not to a extreme degree-- he still acts from emotion and makes mistakes. It's a very human characterization-- both competent but with normal failings. Harry also seems intelligent, but imperfect, with the short-term planning of an 11 year old.
Thank goodness for that salve at the end (not to mention Snape moving when asked). With all the punishment, I was wondering when he was going to get around to offering some incentive to trust him. The line writing is somewhat positive, but I know as a child, I wouldn't have beleived it for a minute (and my childhood wasn't anywhere near as difficult). I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks!! No, Harry certainly won't believe it (or anything Snape says) for awhile, but he'll get there. Snape's doing his best, but doesn't know how to get past Harry's misbehavior, I think. Who knows, maybe he'll loosen up a little? I honestly don't know - he hasn't told me, yet, either!
| Title: Chapter 8: World War II - part 2 | 30 Apr 2009 |
| Reviewer: Quynce (Signed) |
- Kallie is an interesting addition-- I'm curious to see what she has to do with the plot (although a house elf is always useful). Does Harry have Hedwig in this AU? She hasn't been mentioned yet, has she?
The Sev/Harry part is great, but the plot in this section doesn't quite finsh it's arc (like the Kallie section), perhaps that's why it feels somewhat unsatisfactory? Maybe because this level of consistant discipline and rebellion is just awkward for everyone? Harry is distrustful and pushing at boundries; Snape has to follow through everytime with all of his rules and punishments. The tempering part of this kind of interaction (I believe) is some level of emotional connection, which Snape is avoiding. Dumbledore (or Poppy) show some kindness and compassion. Realistically, this is more difficult for Snape, who may feel very strongly about maintaining his authority. Still, he seemed jealous of Harry's connection to Poppy, and he saw the difference between his behavior and Poppy's. The next step is to be nice, offer some positive-- praise,information, a reward, etc. And yet, their relationship started out so negative, maybe Sev is right, though to wait. Harry is so suspicious, they have to build back to feeling neutral.
Author's Response: Hi! Thanks for the review! Yes, Harry has Hedwig - I mentioned her in the first or second chapter (after the prologue.) You're right that I should mention her again, though. I agree with you that the plot arc seems a little unfinished. Oh, well. Once I have another chapter out that won't matter so much. Yeah, Snape needs to figure himself out. He seems to have NO clue what to do with a kid outside of a strict teacher-student relationship. I don't think Harry would react well to Snape being affectionate in any way at this point anyway, though, so, as you say, maybe it's for the best. They'll get it figured out.