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Reviews by Jan_AQ
Dumbledore decides to have an easter egg hunt for the younger students - things do not go as planned.
Oneshot in response to two challenges by Jan_AQ and one of my own. Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: Canon Snape Tags: None Categories: Fic Fests > #21 Springfest 2016, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Drug use, Profanity
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 30 Jun 2016 / 30 Jun 2016 Series: None - Challenges: Drugged, Bunny Snape, Easter Egg Hunt!
Author's Response: Your idea :P A short poem. Fluff, AU Severitus.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving, Snape is Stern Tags: Adoption, Child fic Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: K
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Warnings: None
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 29 Jul 2016 / 25 Jul 2016 Series: None - Challenges: None
A truly horrible thought occurred to Severus, if Petunia had failed to give her nephew the most basic necessities, what else had she withheld? Springfest 2016.
Takes Place: 1st Year - Snape flavour: Canon Snape, Snape is Kind, Out of Character Snape Tags: Snape-meets-Dursleys Categories: Fic Fests > #21 Springfest 2016, Teacher Snape > Professor Snape
Rated: K+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Neglect
Chapters: 1 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 06 Aug 2016 / 06 Aug 2016 Series: None - Challenges: Stealing stuff, Secrets, Smelly Boy, Light Fingered
Author's Response: Thank you so much for taking time to leave feedback, it means a lot to me to hear people's thoughts! It's a real pitiful situation they are both in, which would make a happy ending all the more enjoyable (If I could just see a way out of the predicament without it being too far-fetched!) For now, I've settled for them having an understanding. Thank you again so much! How does one tackle the favour of being reborn? And what part does Harry Potter play in Severus Snape’s new life after the war?
Takes Place: 7th Year - Snape flavour: Out of Character Snape Tags: None Categories: Snape Equal Status to Harry > Comrades Snape and Harry
Rated: T
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Warnings: Suicide Themes
Chapters: 7 - Completed: Yes - Updated: 01 Jan 2017 / 11 Aug 2016 Series: Aftermath - Challenges: None
The descriptions of the artist and the gallery meeting were great. I love that Snape can handle small talk now and that Harry can be into something so completely as painting. I wonder if Harry is bleeding painful magic into his paintings, and if that is the way it is healing him. Or if it's just a way for him to express himself and work through his emotions. I think it's wonderful for him to of picked up a painting hobby. Maybe he'll get really good and just be an artist as his occupation. Though I'm not sure who would appreciate the awfulness of the emotions he surely paints, I can't see it as a dining room attraction. :) I'm curious to find out! Thanks so much for the update! Author's Response: You’re right! What a horror to have a painting like that at one’s home! Thanks for reviewing!
Too bad about Dumbledore dealing with all this guilt, doomed to die again in a short time, having Harry unable to stand his presence. I wonder what that last part is about, and if Harry will get over it before Dumbledore dies. I like that Harry has learned to paint, and that Snape realizes how difficult and much a struggle Harry's tenacity of surviving is. I like to see the two joke together. I find your Snape very much in character with the new situation and feelings he is able to go through. I really like that he moved his quarters upstairs. It shows the profound change he has gone through in obvious outward ways. I wonder what the gallery will be like, and if this new painter has aspirations on Harry. Thank you for writing and sharing! Author's Response: Thanks! I’m glad that you find Snape’s reaction to the resurrection believable and that he is still ”in character” given the situation.
After the third task of the Triwizard Tournament, life in Privet Drive is even more horrible for Harry. Nightmares, chores, punishments... But his life will change when he finds a black cat.
Takes Place: 5th summer, 5th Year - Snape flavour: Snape Comforts, Snape is Kind, Snape is Loving, Overly-protective Snape Tags: Adoption, Animagus!Snape, Hospitalization, Injured!Harry, Injured!Snape, Snape-meets-Dursleys, Spying on Harry! Snape Categories: Healer Snape, Reverse Roles > Healer Harry, Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: 16+
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Warnings: Abusive Dursleys, Physical Punishment Spanking, Neglect, Profanity
Chapters: 11 - Completed: No - Updated: 26 Feb 2017 / 22 Aug 2016 Series: None - Challenges: None
I noticed that a lot of your quotations are missing end punction. For example: "...I hope someone could see that I’m not my father” “So, you are an animagus” Harry continued. They should be written as such: "...I hope someone could see that I’m not my father.” “So, you are an animagus,” Harry continued. Otherwise the writing was good. :) I'm interested to see what happens next. PLease continue!
I liked seeing Harry's thoughts about his situation, and how it compares to Ron's. I felt like the end of this chapter was a little rushed. The explanations of where Harry got the potions doesn't fit in where it is. The explanation needed to been earlier, when potions are first mentioned. Otherwise we are all wondering and hanging, in a state of anxiety until it is explained. So I think maybe around here: " together with a little syringe to put the water and the potions in the cat’s mouth. " Add immediately after that he got the potions from school, using his invisibility cloak to nick them from the hospital wing. Good start with the first chapter. Poor Harry, he goes through a lot in the summer. I did like how you mentioned the Marge incident, and how now the Dursley's will only visit her. I did edit your formatting in the story, and censored the profanity (bad words) in two places. I added profanity as a warning to your story. please don't use the "f bomb" lightly as it will make the rating of your story have to go up to 16+. The letters now look different from the rest of the story, I used block quotes so that they would stand out. Author's Response: I’ve tried to improve the things you’ve told me. Thank you so much for your help, you’re great. The Ministry removes Harry from the 'care' of the Dursley's at the age of three, placing him in the 'National Harry Potter Exhibit and Museum'. Harry spends six years blissfully unaware that every day dozens of people are paying to watch him go about his day through spelled walls. His every whim is catered to by a team of five caretakers, until the Ministry decides to close the exhibit down. Harry is placed in the care of Severus Snape, who must reverse the boy's spoiled upbringing and teach him to be a normal child again.
Takes Place: 0 - Pre Hogwarts (before Harry is 11) - Snape flavour: Canon Snape Tags: Adoption, Child fic Categories: Parental Snape > Guardian Snape
Rated: T
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Warnings: Physical Punishment Spanking
Chapters: 3 - Completed: No - Updated: 27 Aug 2016 / 23 Aug 2016 Series: None - Challenges: None
Fantastic buildup of Harry's background in this chapter. The poor kid never learned how to play with other kids, how to manage his own emotions, how to question things. He had been coddled and spoiled for sure, but I think he is still a good kid. It didn't seem like he tried to get to mischief. But having only caretakers he liked is going to be a problem once he meets Snape. I wonder if Julie and Mitchell are going to be able to visit or write to Harry. In a way, they have been his most consistent parents. What a mess Harry's life and upbringing has been so far. I wonder what it would of been like if Harry grew at Home until he went to Hogwarts, and if he had to return there every summer. Fantastic start! Author's Response: Jan! I have to confess, I had not considered keeping Julie or Mitchell in the story. As soon as I read your comment I realized what a mistake that would have been. Thank you! You will be seeing at least one of them again. Glad you enjoyed it!
It's going to be a tough haul for both him and Snape. I bet it will be for the better though, and now Harry will be able to go to different places he never went to before. Too bad they didn't send all his toys along. I don't see Snape singing to Harry to wake him up, but maybe he'll end up surprising us eventually. :) Oh poor kid. Fantastic start, you're doing a great job with all the characters being in character while exploring this new premise. Thanks for writing and sharing! Please update when you can! |
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