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Title: Chapter 3 07 Jan 2007 7:43 pm
Reviewer: Ebbtide Chequ (Anonymous) [Report This]
    More!
Title: Chapter 3 27 Dec 2006 9:45 am
Reviewer: Catti666 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Thats quite a good start and forming a very good fic. Ok I admit, I just love Severitus fics! Please do post again soon!
Title: Chapter 3 02 Dec 2006 8:03 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]
    Ah, the lovely time delayed letter. :) I loved this line: "It is my wish that Severus steps up, takes responsibility, and becomes a father to Harry" tehe. And then this line was so direct and different, "no force on earth or in heaven, short of a mind-blowing, earth-shattering event, was going to cause him to take Harry bloody Potter as his son." Very good character show there on Snape, everything he did and thought. You did a good job explaining the second letter without actually writing it all out. I don't like reading letters. XD It doesn't look like Llily will get her wish right now. 4 days.. 4 days can be a very long time.
Title: Chapter 2 02 Dec 2006 7:58 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]

    Poor Harry, he's so sick! And then Dudley burned him! :( I can't wait until Snape helps heal the burn though.. hopefully. It's really rich coming from vernon that harry's terrorizing his son. But so in character. You did a good job building up the suspense, especially with, "he heard his uncle on the phone, claiming to have a flat tire to explain that he would be late for work" and then Harry's fear.

    This is kind of awkward phrasing: "When he looked back to his uncle, however, he immediately saw stars and found himself on his knees after his uncle raised the belt in his hand that Harry hadn’t noticed before, and brought it hard and fast across Harry’s face, buckle first." Usually just having an abuse scene with someone doing something for an amount of time isn't something that adds to the story, it actually detracts from it.

    I think that there's enough horrible things in this chapter to not continue on, but you're the author. :)

Title: Chapter 1 02 Dec 2006 7:50 am
Reviewer: Jan_AQ (Signed) [Report This]

    I like how this opens with Snape musing on the war and very important things. It gets us into his head but also does a good job showing what timeframe we are actually in. It also builds Snape's character. I liked that he looked around when he entered the Headmaster's office. I really liked this line: "Granted, if you decide not to, we will have to act quickly and seriously in our attempt to sever your connection to him through the mark, lest we find you dead from it.” It's very direct, but realistic (and dramatic for us).

    Your Dumbledore, to me is a little hidden. I can't tell if he really wants Snape to stop spying becasue he cares about him, or if he's putting on a very good act and doesn't expect, or want Snape to stop spying becasue of the war. It's very intruiging and I hope that I will get to figure it out in later chapters. :)

    I don't like how many times Dumbledore said "My boy." He said it four or five times. it started to be too noticable.

Title: Chapter 2 01 Dec 2006 3:15 am
Reviewer: Mrs_Morbid_Snape (Anonymous) [Report This]
     I loved this story.I hope you update soon.

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