You captured the emotional break down really well. The breaking down of these mental blocks and barriers to finally understand that someone wants to help. You did it beautifully. Perfecto!
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Awww!!! I LOVED it! SO MUCH! omg that was so terribly sweet! Very good story! I loved the way you portrayed Snape! The only think I think was not quite right was that the kids didn't act 11 years old, but that's okay, because I still really liked it. Haha :D Thanks for an amazing story!
Hahahah! You're so funny! xD
"He's playing. I didn't even know he did that." That line, I read it like 3 times. It was so sad, but it seems realistic, which is even more sad. Ahh, I'm rambling now!lol Awesome Chappie!
Aw, I liked the how he had to write that he wasnt a freak for his lines.
| Title: His Child
| 06 Feb 2011 10:28 pm
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| Reviewer: Shhhhh (Anonymous)
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This was the absolute BEST story I have ever read - and I've read THOUSANDS! I just stayed up ALL NIGHT devouring it (sigh, now I'm even late to work finishing) it. THANK YOU - I lOVED IT! It was awesome!!!! I can't wait to read everything else. ps: The bunnies were sort of cute, too.
Strip-tease! Hahahahaha!!! xD
| Title: His Child
| 04 Feb 2011 4:47 pm
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| Reviewer: Albatross1029 (Anonymous)
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Loved this story. Thank you. :)
| Title: His Child
| 28 Jan 2011 6:17 pm
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| Reviewer: Helga (Anonymous)
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THANK you for such a masterpiece! I fall in love with this story and it's chatacters!
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