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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
I like to imagine that they both said it, at the same time, and then shivered at speaking in tandem like... relatives??
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you very much! If you do like Heir to Prince Manor, you should look up its author Snapegirl. She's on several sites and she is a great author. Thanks again Amanda!
Author's Response: Let it fall! lol Thanks for the review!
-P.G. Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you caught that! Ten points to you!! ^^ Thanks again for a review!!
Loved the flashback of Harry's birth...so sweet and poignant and sad all at once. I like your version of Harry's name. It does seem appropriate. The last line...maybe they both spoke together. Oh, I love medieval history too, especially the Tudor era in Britain...mmm, maybe that's considered later than medieval actually. It's fascinating to read about and study, but I do thank my lucky stars that I live in the here and now! Author's Response: Glad you liked the name. I thought it would sound like a "proper" wizarding name and all that jazz. Last line I left up to everyone because I could see some people not thinking Snape would say it or something. (personally, I thought they both said it too, but thought I'd leave it up to everyone) Ooo! Yeah, love the Tudur period, but I thought that was a bit more Renaissance...how sad, I forget!! But I think the Crusades are fascinating, especially the Knights Templar. Their end was quite tragic. Anywho, thanks again for reviewing!!
Fun!!!! Author's Response: It's whatever you want! Thanks for the review!!
Poor Harry...it's too much for him right now...Poor Severus...Not even remembering that he had been married to Lily. Ugh! Dumbledore, you git! I knew it was time to reveal the box! Poor Severus! The truth hits him so hard, and to reveal that Dumbledore, whom he trusted destroyed not only his happiness but his family. The jolts of the parental bond idea is very cool! And there it is. The birth certificate. Poor Harry, finding out that not only is he Severus's son, but that he is practically named after him. And Severus, ugh! This poor man is getting choked by his own emotions. There needs to be a long chat soon with everyone. I'm glad you focused mainly on the shock of the situation rather than going straight to something like, "Oh, we're related? OKAY! I'm perfectly fine with that." Huzzah for keeping the emotion of shock around long enough so that things can kind of register for Harry and Severus. Hmm, just a thought, but I don't think they (nurses, or anyone really) would carry around birth certificates in their pockets. They would at least summon them/conjure them with a wand perhaps. It seems very careless and unprofessional for a wizarding nurse to whip out a birth certificate from a pocket. Another thought: While I agree that Harry might would use the word "shit" to describe the situation, I do not think that just after telling him to watch his tone, Severus would use the same word he told Harry to basically not use. Severus is a very literate man, even in rage. (Perhaps something like...absurd? Insanity? Something like that?) Unless you want your Severus to be more raw sounding. He is - what? (oh dear, math time...) - thirty-six at this point? He would resist using phrases that the younger generation would resort to, but that is just my opinion. (eg. "load of bullocks" would probably not be there...he would simply say "...come up with this was in poor taste.") Typo time: Right before the year break: "With that in mind, she drifted off to sleep, not realizing that a nurse came to tuck Harry away." Do you mean "take" or did you really intend "tuck?" It sounded odd. You forgot the "s" in Hogsmeade. After Severus realizes the truth: "...Headmaster’s face when Severus had told him the truth, the ma’s disappointment, the pain, the betrayal…" Should read, "...the man's disappointment..." Yay! Still doing well on the technical side! Huzzah! Author's Response: Thank you, thank you for all your advice! I tend to get carried away in high stress chapters because I want to make sure the reader feels everything the character's feeling, so sometimes I forget the little things I guess. But thanks for the advice, I did go back and change the little things! :) I'm also very glad you liked the chapter! So, about those names... yeah, I did kinda have reasons for them. First off, with Tiberius, it is a similar name to Tobias (at least to me) and since Lily lost her husband, she wanted to make her son's name as close as possible to Severus's (ie Severin) So the first name is a take off of Severus, later you'll learn that Harrison will be Lily's father's name, Tiberius in the memory Tobias, but not exactly like Tobias since both Severus and Lily hated the man. :) Another reason why I chose Harrison was because I could not just leave the name as Harry and I'm not much taken with Harold myself, so Harrison was a no brainer. (Plus I REALLY like Harrison Ford lol) Thanks for actually take the time to wonder about that. I'm gunna explain it soon though. I'm glad you picked up on James's behavior too, because I wanted to portray him as still just a kid (a selfish kid at that) so he would naturally not be too interested in little children. And I uber glad you liked Sev and Harry's shock. I hate it when the two of them hate each other and then are suddenly okay with each other. *ugh!* But thanks again for your lovely reviews!!
Author's Response: I suppose they could. However you like it, it's fine with me! :) Thanks for the review!!
Oh yeah, Harry will hate the name won't he, and Snape will probably force him to take his name, won't he? I kind of hope that Harry still stays Harry though, even if his last name becomes Snape. I don't know, I just can't get used to Severin!!! LOL!!! Aw, I'm so excited to read the next chapter. I can't believe that this is your first story. Nice work. Author's Response: Aww! *blush* You're too kind! *head getting swollen* Don't worry too much about the names; they're just a formality really. I just thought it would be kinda fun to change the name up a bit. Of course I thought Severus would like all the big, fancy, sophisticated names. lol. Thanks for the review!!
Author's Response: Can do! And thanks for the review! :) |
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