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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Author's Response: Thanks! :D Hope you like the rest too! :)
Author's Response: Haha! Thanks! Glad you liked this one too!
-P.G. Author's Response: Teehee!! I liked it too! ^^ Thanks!!
Loved the scene with Severus and Harry. I'm so happy that finally they each will have someone and not be alone any more. I don't think the Dursleys are in for a pleasant morning, lol! Author's Response: lol No indeed! Glad you liked it! Thanks for the review!
Oh dear. Watch it, Vernon! Nice cover, Severus, for blaming his weight for breaking the chairleg...*snort* And I'm with him on that question: Why did Petunia marry Vernon? I do not blame him for toying with Vernon's brain in the beginning. I would so do it too! Aww, Harry wakes up to think that Severus abandoned him there. Poor Harry. I lik ehow you connected to canon here by having Harry think that Severus is a coward. Good job, you! To me this bit of dialogue does not make sense without something from Harry to cause Severus to say the following: "“You are not,” it was not a question. “Let me see.”" May I suggest that Harry, after springing back up from his chair, mumble under his breath moreso to himself than for Severus, "I'm alright/fine..." Because a statement claiming his own well-being would then be contradicted by Severus saying that he is not well. Just a thought...Take it or leave it. There just seemed to be no reason for Severus' statement there. Oh dear, sweet Merlin! Vernon has majorly ticked off Severus! Typo Alerts: "He did not want to discuses what he had done last night or any other night." Should be "discuss." It is usually phrased "with his gaze" in this sentence: "...the wizard had learned intimidated people, Severus pinned Vernon in his gaze." Two of them in this one: "His lips twitched as he fought down another grin as he hear his brother-in-law’s frantic scrapping about." Change "hear" to "heard" and "scrapping" to "scraping." In this sentence, "Quickly appearating back into his and Lily’s room,..." it should be spelled "apparating." Here, "The moment he was within arm reach, Snape stood up and cupped Harry’s face in his cool hands..." you need to add an apostrophe to "arm" for "arm's." Next one: "Glaring back, least he start to cry in front of the man, Harry..." Change "least" to "lest." Here: "Crying, Vernon gave a started cry of pain before he looked up..." Either remove "crying" or change "cry" to "shout," and also change "started" to "startled." Author's Response: That's okay, at least you caught up! :) I've had a VERY stressful time yesterday too with really bad storms and all. Lost power all day. But I hope things calm down for you. And Thanks once more for the lovely review!!!
I liked how you portrayed the young Snape, and I'm glad he found out about Harry. But he hope that he will realize that verbal abuse is just as bad, leaves scars as well and can hurt even more than pysical abuse! I hope, he'll apologize to Harry and make it up to him! Great Story so far, I really like it! I hope, your Petunia'll grow some balls (even though she's a woman...) and get away from her disgusting husband in order to save her son from becoming even more of a bully and get medical problems because of his weight! Author's Response: LOL I'm glad you like how I've portrayed everyone. But don't worry too much about Sev and Harry. And Vernon...he'll have a life changing experience, not to mention Dudley! lol
Author's Response: Thank you! Those things were fun to write about! XD
Author's Response: Thank ya! Glad you're enjoying it!
Author's Response: Aww! Thanks! That really makes me feel good! :) I'm glad you like it! I'll keep trying to update when I can. Thanks again!! Oh, by the way, fifty points to you...just cause I'm guessing your in Slytherin and I am too, plus you had a nice review! XD |
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