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Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 09 Aug 2009 7:29 pm
Reviewer: Raven Knight (Signed) [Report This]
    So, not only does Tobias have a sick fascination with pushing his son down the stairs but also his wife? Sicko...Aww, and it was his birthday, too. Poor little Severus, sounds an awful lot like Harry's birthdays. I'm curious to know Tobias's cruel end...hmm...Oh, haha, Vernon's left in the dark there about Harry being Severus's son. *snort* Okay, Dudley mumbling to himself while cleaning totally reminded me of canon Kreacher! Giggled at that. Liked Harry's opinion that Snape was unrecognized for his help with VOldemort's downfall, there. I agree with that! Just think, if Lily had not extended her pregnancy, Harry would not have been born in July, thus making his part in the whole Prophecy thing null and void. Then it would have been up to Neville. That's heavy stuff.

    And it is Harry's birthday. *giggles at Severus, "Dear Merlin, what now?"*

    Typo Alerts: "But his effort was futile as large tears rolled down his shallow cheeks." Did you mean "sallow" as in describing a yellowish-hued or sickly complexion, or "shallow" to imply lacking physical depth? "Sucking up it up and pushing down his phobia, Severus adorned his professor mentality before placing a hand on the rail and silently glided down the steps." Two mistakes in that one. Firstly, remove the first "up" in the beginning of the sentence. Secondly, your verb tenses are all over the place in the second half of the sentence. Either use the following combinations: Present tense: "adorns/placing/gliding" or Past tense: "adorned/placed/glided." "The Muggle shuttered visibly." "Shuttered" means something along the lines of, "to close," while "shuddered" means "to shake, quiver, tremble, shiver." "“Come on, of you want to get out of here,” he coaxed." I think you mean, "if you want to get out of here..." "But I know it would have ment the world to your father if you took his name." Change "ment" to "meant."

    Sorry I have been completely lax the last few days. Will try better.

    Author's Response:

    Don't worry it. HAHA! Poor Neville, never thought about that. But, yeah, you're thinking a little too fast, methinks. But I'm glad you liked Dudley complaining. He would, you know.

    Thanks again for the great review! I'm looking forward to your update!!:) 

     

Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 09 Aug 2009 10:53 am
Reviewer: Fairner (Signed) [Report This]
    Tobias is terrible!! T__T

    Author's Response: Yes, he is indeed. Thanks for reviewing!
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 7:02 pm
Reviewer: Ponytail Goddess (Signed) [Report This]
    Good, bad, or ugly? I am 100 percent certain that this falls into the 'good' category. I enjoyed Lily's letter to Harry and am curious if Harry will want to change his appearance or name. I'm even more curious if Snape will be mad at him for shirking his homework to read the letter, though I think a talk between the new father and son duo is long overdue. I hope you update soon--I can't wait to read more!

    -P.G.

    Author's Response: Thank you! ^^ Did you read this all in ONE day?!?!? My goodness! That deserves another...um?...FIFTY POINTS!!! Yay for you! I'm uber glad you're enjoying this! Thanks again!
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 9:28 am
Reviewer: fanficaholic (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Great chapter! Can't wait for more!

    Author's Response: Thanks very much!!
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 6:26 am
Reviewer: Elfwyn (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Nicely done letter.

    Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 4:59 am
Reviewer: Dramagirl007 (Signed) [Report This]
    This was a really awesome chapter. I liked how Vernon tried getting out of trouble but it didn't work. What I don't understand is why Lily didn't say what Harry's real name is in the letter to Harry. Lily wouldn't know that Harry knew what his real name is, so that's kind of questionable. I love this story. Keep up the good work and please update ASAP. :)

    Author's Response: You actually caught me! I thought about putting Harry's name in the letter, but Petunia was supposed to give the birth certificate along with the letter, which she did, so Lily knew that Harry would know his real name. Glad you're thinking though! And Lily would think that Harry would look at the certificate first, since it's a big, 'open' document, unlike the folded, sealed letter. Thanks for the great review!!  
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 4:14 am
Reviewer: Inu Chan (Anonymous) [Report This]
    A very interesting take on the "Severus is Harry's father" theme. I like the stair-phobia idea; I've never seen it (or I think Snape having any other phobia) in any other story. I think this could be part of why Snape is so crabby; imagine a job where you were forced to encounter your fears several times every day. I hope the next chapter comes soon.

    Author's Response:

    Aww! Thanks you. I'm glad you like it so far. Yeah, the stairs thing was a burst of inspiration, but I think it's turning out good. Thanks for the review!!

Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 1:12 am
Reviewer: Kristeh (Signed) [Report This]
    Oh, very powerful chapter! Poor young Severus...I felt so badly for him. I have to admit that I was a bit glad to read that Tobias came to a bad end...not very nice of me, but what a despicable person he was.

    Loved how Vernon just kept putting his foot in his mouth, and when he realized that he had been insulting Severus' son, not to mention abusing him for years.

    Beautiful letter from Lily, but it was so sad.

    I'm looking forward to the next one!

    Author's Response: Thank you! You'll find out exactly what happens to Tobias and Eileen for that matter in a chapter way up aways yet I think. Don't feel bad about not liking Tobias. (no one ever really does!) But I'm glad you liked it!! Thanks again!
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 08 Aug 2009 12:16 am
Reviewer: mithrilandtj (Signed) [Report This]
    Loved the letter.

    I always wondered in these stories when Harry discovers that he's not a Potter...
    What happens with the Potter vaults? Harry is the only heir, blood or not.

    Author's Response: Guess you're going to have to keep reading to find out! ^^ Thanks again for the review!!
Title: Chapter 17: Happy Birthday 07 Aug 2009 11:30 pm
Reviewer: justjoanjm (Signed) [Report This]
    I like it. I don't love the flashback/flash forward a lot, but you're making it work :)

    Author's Response: O! Why thank you! I'm glad you like it!!

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