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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Author's Response: Yes! Well, I'm sure you know that by now. Thanks for another review!! :D
Author's Response: Me too...that's why I'm showing everyone he IS in this story. Thanks for the review!
-P.G. Author's Response: Thanks for the review! And yes, Dumbles should have a stern talking to. Glad you liked it!
Interesting dream Harry had there. I specifically found it interesting that you had the snakes devouring each other (sticking to the Eastern symbolism of snakes and immortality?) Hmm. I am trying to puzzle out your prophecy there. Could the hidden face to be destroyed be Harry wearing James Potter's face, and thus revealing himself as Severus' son, and his mask then slips away? Serpent's child - Harry, being the son of a Slytherin? Head of Snakes could totally apply to Severus here, since he is Head of Slytherin (which would imply that he would conquer). Some forgotten things are already being recalled, thanks to Petunia. Hidden secrets all exposed - oh dear, does this mean, once that Harry's mask slips away and he is thus revealed as Severus' son, then all of those past events would be exposed, including DUmbledore's manipulation of everything? Just some thoughts on that...How close am I? I love how Severus restrained himself from correcting Harry's horrid table manners! *grin* And I'm not so sure if Molly would fix it with the way Ron eats - eugh! I like how you showed that Harry trusts Severus to return his things when he shrinks them and puts them in his pockets. Nice. I had to grin at Severus putting "Big D's" buddies in their places. That was a nice element, and it might have also triggered memories of a younger version of himself when ganged up on by James and Sirius. Awwww, first time apparition made him smile at his son. So adorable! Oh man! Dumbledore's robes sound positively HIDEOUS! *Laughs at sock comment!* So, Severus did not have the portkey, as in it was not originally his? I would have also thought DUmbledore gave it to him, but why would he want the two to interact when he busted himself to separate them in the first place? Hmm...it's an interesting mystery...Oh, man. Totally not liking Dumbledore. We seem to be of the same mind in regards to that meddling old coot! Poor Severus! Hope he does get him back! Typo Alerts: "...and was be prey to his imagination and his newly discovered memories." The word "be" does not have to be there. "...Hogwarts would be watched carefully, and Prince Manner was unlivable at this time." Unlivable is correctly spelled "unliveable." "All of his school belonging were still in his trunk,..." You need to pluralize "belonging" here for "belongings." While I know what you mean by this sentence, "The Potions Master had never been very good about whining, not even from Malfoy!" might I suggest replacing "good" with "tolerant?" "He would need to talk to Professor Snape about it latter." One "t" in "later." "“Awe, is Potty scare?”" When spelled with an "e," awe implies a sense of reverence, and respect, but when spelled without the "e," you get the expression of condescension, protest, disgust. You are aiming for the latter of those. "...the man looking out over the meadow, as alert as a mother dear." You need the other "dear/deer" here. Replace it with "deer," for the woodland creature also known as a doe. I tend to make this mistake a whole ton of times myself, but "Would Snape tell Dumbledore that Harry was his son and not James’s?" There the end "s" is not required, so it should read, "James'?" "He just wished he was at the Weasley,..." I am not sure of the plural possessive there, it could be "Weasleys'" or "Weasley's." However, I would simply substitute the questionable plural word, and avoid the issue altogether by saying, "...at the Burrow..." This occurs numerous times after that sentence, and I just am not sure about that pluralized possessive there. Just wanted to alert you to it, in case it might be incorrect. It could even BE correct. I'm not sure. Author's Response: LOL Yeah, I'm not sure what brought on the Headmaster's outfit. I was just trying to think of something outrageous I thought the old scutter might where, and that's what I came out with. lol Yeah, the sock thing I couldn't resist. And YAY to you for seeing that Snape was defending Harry in part because of his own lousy time in school. Ten points to you! And another for liking the appartion! ^^ As to the prophecy...*shrug* who knows? Harry dosen't, Snape doesn't, and no one else should know either. lol But if you REALLY wanna know... well let's just say you have pretty good hunches. Thanks for reviewing, and I'll try to read yours tonight. I've had a time the past several day. Ugh for whiny school friends! *rolls eyes* Thanks again!
Author's Response: lol Sorry about those. I just type too fast and when I look over them I suppose everything looks right to me! No, you're not bugging me, so don't worry. I wish I could catch those stupid little things! Hopefully when I leave for college, they'll beat it out of me! Anywho, thanks for the review!
Author's Response: lol I'm sure Voldy would like that! Thanks for the review!
I hope the DEs are not up to their usual mischief....huh, that makes them sound like a bunch of harmless kids, doesn't it? Author's Response: lol Yeah, a little bit. lol Don't worry though, just eat a cookie and things will get better! Thanks for the review!!
Okay, so MAYBE I'll forgive you, if you give me a cookie. How come Severus allowed Harry to go back to the Dursleys? Why didn't he just tell DD that he was Harry's father. As Harry's father, he could insist that Harry not go there, couldn't he? Or was he too hesitant because it would be too dangerous. But then, Privet Drive is way too dangerous for Harry too. The Dursleys will kill him now after what Snape did to them. Oh no! Yes, Ivy I'm sorry that I doubted you. You always come through. :) Author's Response: Ok, first, take a deep breath, ok? Now, take a bite of your cookie, chew, then swollow. Now, relax! I've got it all figured out! Update's on the way! Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: Sorry. But the next chapters on the way!
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