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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Author's Response: GOOD!! Glad I made you smile. :) Hey, thanks for all the reviews today!! They made ME smile. :)
-P.G. Author's Response: OMG! You say shiznit too! That's great!! Twenty points to you just for that!! And thanks for the review!
p.s. im sorry for my english. Author's Response: There's nothing wrong with your English. And thanks for the review!!
Author's Response: Aww! Thank you!! All rise. I'm super glad you liked it! Thanks again for another awesome review!
I could be completely tired, and my mental facilities not properly functioning, but I did not understand this sentence: "Harry’s discomfort at the Dursleys might be scarified, but his over all health and wellness are secured.”" I know the gist, but for some reason I find it very difficult to follow. (But "over all" needs to be one word here...) I have a feeling that Severus is more correct in his statement about "if you leave Harry at the Dursleys, he'll die," comment than both the elder wizards think. Because Lucius is coming! Oh dear. *nervous* And Dumbledore knew about the cupboard!? What a...a...GIT! I feel so bad for Severus here. In a way it is good that he held his tongue, but it isn't. I can totally understand that he would think Dumbledore would try the same trick about erasing both of their memories about it. Oh no! He's being called! Not good! And Petunia. I like how she is sick at the sight of Dumbledore having known what he has done before. And Harry will be by himself, with Death Eaters coming? This is bad! WHy wouldn't he just secure the wards THEN!? Dumbledore is a moron! Did Severus answer the call? And overhear everything? Oh man! If so, that poor man! Nice how Severus can go through the wards being related. That certainly comes in handy. This was a very exciting chapter. Very good! Typo Alerts: "The old fool deserved Severus’s brutal words." Again, like last chapter, which I myself and guilty of, the possessive of Severus is "Severus'." "My boy, some times it’s for the over all good..." "some times" and "over all" should be one word. "At Harry’ nod, Dumbledore messed up the boy’s hair affectionately." Needs to be editted to "Harry's." The sentence after that also needs an end quotation mark. "...it had not been the same as actually see ing them again." Connect "see" and "ing." You need a second quotation mark after the word "hissed" in the following sentence: "“Hurry!” Lucius hissed. Hurry so that another may come in and help you!”" "...to the place where they had both apparate that morning." Make "apparate" past tense to "apparated." "Only when they stopped so actually transport..." Change "so" to "to." Author's Response: Yay! UBER glad you liked it! I never know what to think about Lucius...I like Draco (most of the time) but Lucius goes either way with me. And the one sentence wasn't really supposed to make that much sense. It's DUMBLEDORE! And yays to you that you caught the irony in Sev's statement about Harry dying! I thought I was imagining it at first, but then it made me smile as though it was my own little secret, but I'm willing to let you share it. Ten points to you!! But Dumbly will sure have a shock when he finds the Dursleys house burned and Harry missing. *smiled evilly, enjoying this far too much* And yes, the one snippet with the DE meeting, it was Severus in the background. The DE's were too excited about finding Harry that they never really checked anyone else out, and sense Sev had the robes and the mask, what did they care? But I'm so happy you liked it! You know, about the whole "James'" vs "James's" debate, I was taught that no matter what, you're techincally supposed to have it like "James's", however, "James'" would have worked out alright in older English. I even have a nifty little book that tells me so. What did they always say? Names of famous people in the past that had been recorded only get the apostrophe? Ex: Jesus'. That one I know for sure only gets one. But for modern themes and time it's an "s's" Does that make sense? I could quote the stuff to you later if I go get my book if you want, but that's really odious... Thanks again for the review! Have some jello!!
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying this! ^^ And don't worry about Dumbly. He'll get his due! Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: LOL! That's hilarious! Thanks for the lovely complement and the review! Have some jello!
Author's Response: Glad to hear it. Thanks for the review!
Author's Response: Why, you can have ANY color jello you want! Blue it is for you then! ^^ I'm glad you liked the chapter! Thanks for the review! |
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