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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
and doesn't the Dumbledore know Legilimency? there is a mistake about Harry's age; you wrote fifteen-year-old but he's 14.
Author's Response: Sorry, but you'll see in the next one if I remember correctly. Thanks for another review!
Typo Alerts: "...Dumbledore interrogated his son, but he still wanted Harry t be able to hold his own against that Headmaster." Add an "o" to that poor singular "t" in that sentence. It happens. "...even though he could tell the old woman could get onthe Potions Master’s nerves." Separate "onthe" in there. "“I’ll miss you to ma’am.” And he meant it too." The first "to" needs to be "too," too. "Severus nodded, sitting down next to his son, ready to case the spell." "Case" should become "cast." "“Harry, we cannot simply runaway from everyone, or from our problems.”" Separate "runaway." "...he was going to have a hard time treating Severus like the Potions Master he had know." SHould be "known" right at the end there. "And board the train. Do not terry out here too long." It should be spelled "tarry." "...he did not have time to dwell on his sense of loss as he heard several loud cried from behind him." Change "cried" to "cries." Author's Response: ^-^ Yeah, I liked that line too (am I allowed to say that???) But I thought it was dry enough to be Snape. And maybe we'll get to see Mrs. Cadogan again...maybe... and neither Sev or Harry want Harry to look like James anymore. It's really a matter of pride for both of them. And yep! Sev took the cloak! XD Nicked it when Harry wasn't lookin'. XD And you'll see that things will get a lot more exciting... Thanks for the review Raven!
Yeah, yeah. I know that having his "Harry" face is probably a wise move but I still don't want him to do it. *sniff-sniff* He and Sev were finally accepting who he is and who they are to each other and are getting along quite well. Now they have to go back to the real world where they can't be their real selves. Author's Response: *hands CeeCeeMee kleenex* Sorry you're having issues, so here's a tissue! (yeah, I know I'm lame, sorry about that) Don't fret too much. Harry and Sev will find a way to spend somemore time together...but you didn't hear it from me!! Thanks for the review, and have a brownie!!
Great chappie. Aren't Hermione and Ron going to keel over from shock. They think that he's dead after all!! :) I can't wait to see everyone's reaction. Author's Response: Nice try, but you only get one brownie! lol
Great chappie. Aren't Hermione and Ron going to keel over from shock. They think that he's dead after all!! :) I can't wait to see everyone's reaction. Author's Response: :D Glad you loked it, and Ron and Hermione are going to be shocked for a little while, yes. Thanks for the review Pandora, and have a brownie!!
If I were Harry, I wouldn't acquiesce that easy to letting him have my invisibility cloak. If my mom sniped one of my jackets I'd be quite upset. Hope your week gets better. Author's Response: Ha! My mom's bad at stealing my shoes... but Harry had other things on his mind other than his cloak. So glad you liked everything and thanks for the review J! Have a brownie!! XD
Author's Response: :D Yay! Thanks! Have a brownie!
Author's Response: Thanks hawkswench, I'm glad you're enjoying it! Dumbles isn't going to be very high on anyone's "nice" list, so just hold on! Thanks for the review! brownie? |
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