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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Ron needs to calm down! I don't even like Ron all that much in canon, and this only makes me dislike him more. (What a poor excuse for a best friend.) "“You’ve been a snake in lions clothing all this time, haven’t you?” Ron scowled." *smacks Ron in the face* HA! Ron's image of "snakes crawling out from under Snape's robes like he was some sort of demon!" That's hilarious! "...yet it comforted Harry to realize that his father was always going to be there to watch out for him." This strikes me as foreboding! What if Severus isn't always around to watch him? Trouble, trouble, boil and bubble, methinks. Good choice though, Harry, to keep that secret a secret. Don't tell Ron. He'd blab it to everyone! (Can't stand Ron.) "I’d’ve thought you’d be happy to see me even in Slytherin green since you spent the last month thinking I was dead.”" GO HARRY! That was a good slap-in-the-face! Interesting Divination class there. So, Severus is a Light Seer then...interesting. Hmmm, and Harry is suspicious that Trelawney knows. Draco wishing Harry would get detention was funny. Poor Draco, I can see him scowl into his cake before spearing it intending to enjoy it as much as possible. Oh, that last paragraph had my heart aching for Severus. Typo Alerts: "...he had to worry about people coming to kill and/or harm he and his child, and sprinkled on top that the fact of the matter was that no one could even know he had a son." Still should read, "him and his child," and "and sprinkled on top that the fact," you need something like the word "of" between "top" and "that," with a comma after "that," otherwise it reads a bit awkwardly. Draco's dialogue: "...quite frankly, I don’t like ite ither.”" Should be "it either." "...they would not let the Slytherin’s pick on Harry..." No apostrophe is needed in Slytherins. "The Potions Master looked completely different as he stood there now then from when he had been their earlier that morning." "Then" should be "than." "“Thought Slytherin’s didn’t like muggle-borns..." Same as before, no apostrophe is needed in Slytherins. Also, when you have something in quotations like, "E," the comma or period goes within the quotation, not outside of it. "In fact, her bug eyes got even wide, if possible,..." Should be "wider." "This year, Hogwarts has been chosen to participate in a competition called the Triwizard Tournaments.” I believe it is a singular "Tournament," rather than plural. "In fact there was a vain in the Potions Master’s neck..." Wrong spelling. You need "vein." "Frankly, Harry thought the whole thing sound a bit ridicules." Do you mean, "ridiculous?" "...Snape snapped to attention, his body ridged and his wand close at hand." Do you mean "rigid?" Author's Response: That's okay, I understand. I mean, I faded away a bit in your story too before I was able to catch up. No worries, it'll still be here for you later when you have time. ^_^ Hope things calm down for you! Now, yes, Ron's being a prat. He's going through what I've been calling his moody puberty stage, kinda like in the book. He's being a major prat I think, but Hermione should bring him around soon. And I did like writing about Snape kinda like a monster. It gave me pleasure to make Ron scared. And Harry's being smart about keeping his secret. With the Tournament coming up, he can't afford to be betrayed by anyone. I'm a little surprised you found the one line foreboding (you weren't supposed to think of it like that yet! ;D ) But things will get crazy here soon, and the last paragraph's important for the next chapter. That's when some things blow up. ^_^ Lots'o angst. But thanks for review and catching some mistakes. This one was written during a really crazy time for me when I had, what felt like, EVERYTHING due at the same time. Thanks again, and I can't wait for your next update!! :D
Author's Response: LOL Glad you know what All My Children is. (my grandma always watches it and I've seen it before when I was little) But yeah, it's getting kinda dramatic! ^_^ But Sirius isn't going to like a lot of the news that's going to come to him. Thanks for the review Drama, and I'm working on the next!
like i said, i hope you update soon :) Author's Response: :D First off, you're screen name is hilarous! XD I love it! And THANK YOU!! I'm uber glad you like my story! It really does give me the insane amount of joy when people tell me that they like my story. ^_^ You just totally made my day because of this review! And I know the feeling where you MUST keep reading a story and you can't wait for more, so you telling me I've created a story like that just made my day!! So thank you very much! And the update is in production. ;)
Also, I hope Sirius puts his prejudices aside and is happy Harry has someone to care for him. After all, Harry has enough problems to deal with. Author's Response: Thanks! Ron will come around...but after he gets his panties out of their bunch. And Harry will figure everything out eventually with regard to his father being a Seer. And when has Sirius and Severus EVER put aside their differences? lol No, but things are about to heat up. Thanks so much for the review!!
Author's Response: Ha! Sev's already what he thinks in "protective overdrive" but he's going to learn real soon just how far his patience and worrying can stretch. Thanks for a nice review!!
Author's Response: ^_^ Thanks so much! Next chappies in the making!!
The Severus as a light seer thing is very interesting too. It's a bit worrisome that he looses power while he is predicting things--something really bad could happen to him if that happened while he was with Voldemort. He'd have no clue what information he was spewing, and then no protection from what Death Eaters might do to him while he's passed out. Hell, what if the Death Eaters/Voldemort already know? Maybe Severus has already given them advantages... I really hope Harry tells him; it's not safe for him to be a spy like this. I'm loving this soap opera! I hope you finish your projects soon so that there will be more updates! -P.G. Author's Response: P.G. Your review just made my night! I totally got flames on ff.net for one of my earlier chapters because some guy thought I was okay with child abuse or something and totally just like yelled at me through e-mail. Jerk. Didn't even think that things in my story were different than from in the real series. So thank you for a NICE review. It makes me feel better to know that some people like my writing. So yeah, Draco and Harry are going to try and be civil, but we'll see how long that lasts, won't we? And Ron...he'll come around eventually. It's a good thing Sev's not a spy anymore or he'd be in even MORE trouble! But yeah, if he was ever caught...it wouldn't be pretty, would it? Harry will figure things out eventually. So I'm really glad YOU are enjoy the story so far, and thanks for another review!! It makes me feel better.
Author's Response: Well, I'm glad you found me! And I'm super glad that you're enjoying this so far!! :D I'm getting everything finished up, but don't worry, I can never not update really. The longest I've gone was maybe two weeks? Maybe? Anywho, thanks again and I'll update when I can. Thanks for the review!!
Author's Response: Thank you very much Fmh! Glad you liked it! Yep, I thought a resorting was in order because I love to add things and twist then here and there. It's like a hobby of mine or something. Thought just having the tournament would be too boring. XD So thanks so much for the awesome review and the next chappie's in production. |
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