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Reviews For Where Once Was Light
Do you already have this story written because you are posting so fast. I'm really impressed with how well this is written too. Update soon please! Author's Response: Ummm...no I don't have the story written, I'm writing every day. I had the idea of the story lined out before and had actully started writing the first couple chapters or so when my brother accidently deleted all of my works. (I had had other stories already written too *sigh*) So this is a revise of my original with a few new things added in. (Snape being a Seer for instance) But I'm thrilled that you're enjoying it so far! And I should have another chapter up tomorrow. Thanks for reviewing!! :)
Author's Response: No worries there! Thanks for the review!!
I have a little constructive criticism. Nothing big, fear not. Just a few notes. Towards the beginning I think you may have meant to say, "Death Eater meetings" as opposed to "Death Eater meets." Also, Snape's long hyphenated title for Harry: "Boy-Who-By-Every-Right-Be-Dead-By-Now" I think you are missing a "should" in there. After he makes it across the room: "What, did Potter and Petunia not like the idea of him in the house? Well, probably now, but still!" Do you mean "not" instead of "now?" RIght before your time break: "...Severus stroked the bird unconsciously, enjoying the fell on it against..." Phrase should be "...enjoying the feel of it against..." Hope that helps somehow. This is your first story? Well, if so, huzzah to you! You are doing wonderfully so far! I just need to get myself in gear and get cracking on my own story...though I will never make as good time as you are. Slowest writer on the planet! *points to self* Author's Response: Hello and thanks for the review!! AND the criticism. No one reviews my chapters before I post them, so I try my best to, but I think since I know what I want to say, I end up skipping the obvious. Thanks for liking it so far! Everyone's been great about this. I was worried that no one would like it. :S But I've been wrong before. I'll try and watch out for my little mistakes better next time! My mind tends to wonder quickly from sentense to sentense, so I just let my fingers fly where they want. (Not always good sometime!) But I'm glad you like my little dramas. I'm a huge drama fan as I think it makes things more interesting. Thanks again, it means a lot!! ;) Oh, and fifty points to you for being the first one for having constructive criticism!!
Author's Response: Teehee! Yeah, he'd flip! Thanks for reviewing!
Author's Response: Welcome! And thank you for the lovely review!!
Author's Response: Aww! Thank you! Don't worry, it's coming really soon. Promise!!
Author's Response: I do try! lol
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Author's Response: Thank you very much!!
I really like Petunia's flashback, seems that she didn't hate Lily just the choice she made with James, I wonder how she felt when Lily went back with James. Author's Response: Hello and thanks for the review! Just stay tune and hopefully all your questions will be answered! |
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