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Reviews For Harry and His New Family
He's also very outspoken. Most abused children are not that outspoken, especially so soon after the abuse and being introduced into new surroundings. Nevertheless, great chapter! Author's Response: I have seen a lot of different reactions of abused children and teenager. Some are very clingy others are withdrawn or agrresive to others or themselves. Each child is so different. Still I never attempt to show real life in my stories. I just write them to balance myself out. Therefore Harry has to suffer so much and my adults character always make a lot of mistakes. I'm glad you nevertheless like the story.
Be careful to watch the tenses. You seem to want to write in the past tense, but not everything matches right. For example: "Harry didn't knew what to say to all this." It should be "Harry didn't know what to say to all this." Know is present tense because didn't is past tense already and you aren't supposed to have two past tense words in a row. Author's Response: I will check it again. The tenses are very hard for me. :(
Author's Response: Thanks for the review!
Nice work, and I'm looking forward to more. Author's Response: Thank you very much!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review!
Beautiful chapter...please add more soon...will this be a HG/HP or a GW/HP(Ginny) or are we just focusing on the new family/guardian thing or do you not want to spoil it?? Author's Response: I'm not sure about the a pairing. Right now Harry has other problems and the story is concentrating on the family. So I haven't thought about it so far, but he will definitely have girlfriend later. Thanks for your review!
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