OOh, I love the changes in this chapter especially. I feel both their emotions and tempers reaching boiling point, even more so, than the original version.
I can remember the last time I read this how annoyed I was with Snapes, diatribe towards HArry. Harry didn't ask Malfoy to show up at Privet Dve. How come that wasn't going to be a problem. Harry was just reacting to what Malfoy had said.
But then again, Snape doesn't hate Malfoy, does he?
And if Snape had not responded to Harry's challenge in the yard, even if they were being watched by a DE, the DE would not have known that there was an Order member there. And how would a DE be there anyway with the protection that DD invoked.
Anyway, love that Snape and HArry interacted, even if it wasn't very satisfactory from Harry's POV.
Onwards,
Lesley
| Title: The Watcher
| 31 Oct 2008 2:37 am
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| Reviewer: Deco (Anonymous)
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I love fics where Snape is suitably nasty...
| Title: The Watcher
| 20 May 2007 5:09 pm
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| Reviewer: Delaine (Anonymous)
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Another good chapter. I don't think Snape was justified in telling off Harry. I thought Harry handled things very cleverly. What is up with Draco though? I can't wait for more. Oh, wait. There is more. Lots more. Yippie! I love it when I discover good stories with so many chapters.
Cheers,
Delaine
I like your Snape, he's really Snapy. (otherwise know as in character) I'm glad that you let Harry get in his two cents though. You have this nice balence in this chapter between a kid Harry and an adult Harry. Like he's all nervous getting caught by Snape and he sits when he's told to. But then he also holds his own, first yelling at Snape and then later holding his tongue. Oh and I think Harry's solution to getting an Order member to help him was quite clever- shouting out to the world like a crazy kid. It fits his St. Brutus' image...
Author's Response: Lol, well, I did try to make him Snapish. It bothers me when he's not... you know how that goes. I also liked Harry's solution to his problem- I thought it was clever. I try not to go with my bias and depict him as an idiot, as some people do. He's not an idiot... he's just a bit irrational.
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