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Reviews For Antiquity's Corollary
Oooh, I am so frustrated for Harry. He still comes off as being a prat. And how dare Hermione attack him straight away, especially when she knows how Snape feels about Harry. Bill and Ron were the only cool ones here. Thanks for another chapter. Lesley
2. you spelled Port Key, Portkey, and portkey. It's the latter. 3. “Ok,” Dumbledore said. Very American. "Very well" is more likely. But very engaging story.
Your Dumbledore doesn't seem evil/bad or whatever in this chapter. I like that he listened to both Snape and Harry and then lectured both of them. It seems as though a lot of stories have Harry painted as a saint and Snape as the bad guy. But they both have their faults... and I'm glad that you let Dumbledore point it out. Oh and I forgot to mention this for the last chapter. You had Dudley wanding off with his thug friends (ch. 1) and then later he was back in the house. It seems odd, like I didn't think enough time had passed... but it's not really that big of a deal, just wanted to point it out. It was enjoyable to see Dudley all trembly.... Author's Response: Yes, I tend to have flawed characters, which I like- and I think that it does need to be pointed out at times. Hmm... you do have a point about the elapse of time. I never really went back and explained that- it's kind of hard to fit into the story context stupid little things like the fact that Dudley said goodbye to his friends during this time, because it's not from Dudley's POV and I really kind of write from Harry's perspective (And later, Snape's)... a bit like JK Rowling does. I don't write what Harry doesn't know unless it's something that has to do with Severus... or occasionally Dumbledore. |
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