Jeez, Harry's a dolt sometimes. Hope he does some growing up soon. I believe we're starting to get as bored with this behavior of his as Snape is.
"Whatever someone says while on fire shouldn't count"--brilliant! And funny!
But later, when Severus is musing about his projected schedule for Harry, it should be "chomping" at the bit, rather than "chopping". "Chomping at the bit" is a phrase referring to an impatient horse, moving its mouth around the bit (the metal crosspiece attached to its bridle/reins) in its mouth.
I really like your imaginative story telling!
What a funny--and even in its own way, loving--bath! That was delightful!
| Title: Chapter 29 - End of a Journey
| 28 May 2008 7:03 am
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| Reviewer: Kelly (Anonymous)
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Aww
that was real great, i've been reading this story for the past two days, and i was way to engrossed to leave you a review, great work, I loved how you portrayed snape though I think at times Harry was out of character. But i liked it, it was subtle, although at times, like when harry litterally acted like a five year old, or just didnt think like himself (when he took a great deal of pleasure at Draco's pain) or said things like he goofed off during his first few years at Hogwarts, I just don't think that's quite accurate, but in any case I loved ur portrayal of snape, and how he acted toward Harry, perfect. the scene with sirius really upset me, but i think it was true and that was a reason JKR had to kill him off, Harry couldn't possibly live with him happily. He lost his own childhood in Azkaban he wouldn't know how to raise Harry
Anyways great work!
Really, brillant actually :)
| Title: Chapter 6 - Guardianship
| 10 May 2008 8:02 pm
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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*laughs* Harry just always seems to get himself into trouble without meaning to, doesn't he?
| Title: Chapter 5 - You're on Fire
| 10 May 2008 7:18 pm
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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Well, all things considered, Snape's being a very good sport about all this. He could've just decided not to bother with Harry and let him run about willy-nilly as long as he didn't kill himself or destroy Snape's property.
| Title: Chapter 4 - Even Hotter
| 10 May 2008 7:05 pm
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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He's really burning up with fever! (Cool!) How did you ever come up with that idea? That's so neat.
| Title: Chapter 3 - Getting Warmer
| 10 May 2008 6:46 pm
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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Still reading, still enjoying.
| Title: Chapter 2 - A Bath and Breakfast
| 10 May 2008 6:37 pm
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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I really liked how you characterized the Dursleys, especially Petunia. Usually I find that she's being portrayed as subserviant to Vernon and here you show a more equal relationship. I really liked how she said, "Don't be ridiculous," as she tossed her cleaning rag aside; she just seemed in charge.
The cleaning speel Snape uses on Harry is also very clever.
| Title: Chapter 1 - Floo Me Away
| 10 May 2008 7:09 am
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| Reviewer: honilee@LJ (Anonymous)
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Wow! Great first chapter! Both Snape and Harry are very in-character and I really like the direction this story is heading in; I look forward to reading the rest of it!
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