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Reviews For Muggleville
Title: The Visit 22 Dec 2005 6:05 pm
Reviewer: das (Anonymous) [Report This]
    i like it did you leave the one ff.net?

    Author's Response: The one on fanfiction.net is still up. I will be updating it later, probably after I finish chapter 20 or 21.
Title: The Visit 08 Dec 2005 8:42 pm
Reviewer: GoddessMoonLady (Signed) [Report This]
    *wince* That story of theirs was so obviously fake it was painful. Seriously, lol, I had to skim over it. *grin* You'd think they'd go for something simple like Snape was close friends with Harry's birthparents and when they died he had been given custody. If anyone asks for the papers they could have said they were destroyed in a fire or something. Simple. lol, then again, their story was abviously wizarding in origin. *grin* Great chaps!! More Please!! ASAP!

    Author's Response: LOL, I know. I could have gone the normal way but then where the originality? I actually came up with the story with my friend on AIM, and it was a lot funnier there with her than when I actually sat down and wrote it all out. oh well. Thanks for your review!
Title: The Visit 04 Dec 2005 12:56 am
Reviewer: ERMonkey (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Lol. Goat rebellion. Very amusing. UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!

    Author's Response: Haha, thanks. XD
Title: The Visit 30 Nov 2005 2:22 am
Reviewer: TheBonnie (Anonymous) [Report This]
    TeeHee, found it, love it, CAN'T wait for more darling, btw, did you get my first message regarding your reveiw?


    Author's Response: Hiyas! :) Yes, I did get it and I sent you an e-mail back. I think you should have got it. Thanks for your review! :)
Title: The Visit 27 Nov 2005 6:26 am
Reviewer: Barbegazi (Anonymous) [Report This]
    omg! So you were updating!
    I had forgotten all about this website and continued to return dutifully to fanfiction.net in the hopes that you had updated there. Just when I was about to give up hope, I went to your user page to see if you'd left an explanation... There was none of course, but I did see your website and so - I am here.
    I love this story so much. And Snape was actually civil to Harry. *shock*
    Speaking of Harry, I think you do a wonderful job of making his thoughts seem childlike but still have hints at his actual age. Very nicely done.
    I shall wait for the next update. (Now that I know where to find it)

    Author's Response: you betcha! :) I'm sneaky like that. I also posted a muggleville one-shot for Halloween in October. Thanks so much for your review, I enjoyed reading it. :)
Title: The Visit 26 Nov 2005 6:08 am
Reviewer: krazey_forever (Anonymous) [Report This]
    I love this story. I was reading it at FF.net previously and while browsing this site, I saw that there were 2 chapters I hadn't read, and geeze, it's still amazing!

    Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Title: The Visit 26 Nov 2005 3:02 am
Reviewer: Sandra (Anonymous) [Report This]

    Another awesome chapter!!! I love this story so much:) I did notice a handful of typos - couching instead of coughing, a missing "not" here or there, and a few others. Drop me a copy of the file to sandrabs52@y...com  if you'd like me to catch them all for you and send it back - I can do 'track changes' in word, or just highlight them or something. Thanks again for sharing your incredible talent with us and I'll be happily awaiting the next update!



    Author's Response: Ah! Haha, I made that "couching" mistake at least 3 times when I was writing it and I kept fixing them right away but I guess I didn't get them all. Thanks so much for your offer! I usually just edit the new chapter the days after I first post it (and anytime I catch a mistake) and just change it. I am planning to edit all the chapters (if I can get through them, chapter 11 was a killer) after I post chapter 20, but i may take you up on your offer! :) Thanks!

    Admin edit: Jan - Please don't list your e-mail in a review. There's no protection on the site for it. Thanks. :)
Title: Welcome to British Airlines 25 Nov 2005 8:50 pm
Reviewer: phantomsgirl04 (Anonymous) [Report This]

    Aw...poor Harry; he's rather confused about his pretend family, isn't he? I would be too...although Snape pretending to be his father is even funnier when you think of all the Severitus fics out there...and thanks for the great descriptions of airplane travel-I've never been on a plane, and I really could imagine it...awesome OC in Kathleen as well-she was very nice to little Harry *giggles*

    --Amber


    Author's Response: LOL, you're right! That wasn't my intention. XD But a confused Harry is a fun Harry! Wow, awesome that the plane seemed real to you, since you're never been on one. That's awesome. I'm glad you liked my OC. :) Thanks!
Title: Introductions 25 Nov 2005 8:36 pm
Reviewer: phantomsgirl04 (Anonymous) [Report This]
    Tehe! Right off the bat, I love the absentmindness of Hoppity...she forgot to use magic...So funny! But then again, she could have been thinking as a Muggle...oh, this is great: "Hoppity nodded and pretended that she remembered what Dusky's tonic was." LOL!!! This is a great line describing Hoppity's personality a bit-she's eager to please, isn't she? OH!!! "It was then that the office door sprung open to reveal the ugliest man she had ever seen." What a way to introduce Severus! You weren't lying when you said, 'no romance,' were you? LOL Well...Severus is NOT attractive-no matter how many stories you read that say otherwise. And the jab about Hoppity's name was made in Severus's perfect snark...YEA chapter!
    --Amber

    Author's Response: LOL, yeah totally no romance. The purpose of the story was to have Snape and Harry go through a Muggle childhood-like summer. :) And no romance was in that plan. YEA review! :D Thanks!
Title: The Deaging Potion 25 Nov 2005 8:23 pm
Reviewer: phantomsgirl04 (Anonymous) [Report This]

    Ah, a Harry POV chapter...I quite liked the description of his side of the battle-we heard from Dumbledore, and now we hear from Harry-his feelings were open, which is a common thing with him...and I noticed the apprehension about the Portkey-I don't think, in canon anyway, that Harry will ever truly be comfortable traveling that way...oh and this: "He hoped that Dumbledore had some children's clothes that were less crazy than the old man's robes." Poor Harry-can you imagine: he has to wear Dudley's old huge handmedowns, and then, he has to wear a copy of Dumbledore's crazy Wizarding robes! Too funny! Luckily, that's not the case...and YEA for a trampoline! Although, I rather lost my love for one after I broke my ankle jumping...Excellent chapter, as always-I liked your description of both the potion and the change that accompanied it. Harry's curious thoughts seemed to be supressed as a teenager-but they certainly came out as a kid!

    Hey, this sounded a little weird..."the only time Moody had moved from his spot was to inspect the house elf and tray that had been brought Harry his dinner earlier"-you might consider rewording it...
    --Amber



    Author's Response: Ack! You broke you ankle... wow. I unfortunately can't jump on trampolines very much myself, I'm sensitive to free fall (it hurts) so I can go on for a little bit before it gets to be too much. Yeah and imagine Harry in Dumbledore's robes.. I should so write something with that. :) Yeah that last sentence was weird, I must have spent 5 minutes trying to get it right when I first wrote the chapter, "the only time Moody had moved from his spot was to inspect the house elf, and the tray it had been carrying, when it brought Harry his dinner earlier." how's that? Thanks so much for you review! :D

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