This is just a wonderful chapter and I really can't wait to see what Snape is going to do. I read this last night, but I was too sleepy to leave a coherent review.
I also loved the interaction between Harry and that bully. It's good to see him standing up for himself
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! Harry standing up for himself.. yeah that was a good thing of you to mention. The Bully's going to do something tomorrow and I have to remember that Harry can stand up for himself. Thanks for reading the chapter! :)
trampolines? ouu fun. you know...once there was a big thunderstorm on a memerial day. My friend and I had planned to go swimming at my one cousins. But as it was raining we weren't suppose to. Only we didn't care and wnet and had fun. A trampoline that's wet is kinda fun. hehe. A wittle Harry! yay!
Author's Response: You know, when you said a "widdle Harry" I thought you said a "widdle wet Harry"! Hahahaa... that would be cute though...
haha. Hoppity mange them. I'm thinking not. And I don't think it got through my head the past two times I read it...but you put colonies...I like. :D
Author's Response: thankyou! :D
hehe. she is her name. no other words for her. Hoppity is hoppity all the way.
Author's Response: Hehehe... now do you think more of a frog or a rabbit when you hear that name?
If only he knew what he was in for, to bad I do. ;)
Author's Response: Heh heh heh. *evil grin* We both do. ;)
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| 24 Jan 2005 7:46 pm
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Sorry, just had to add UPDATE soon please!
Author's Response: :P LOL. I'm trying, I'm trying! But you know what? You singularly put me in a GREAT mood to write today. Thanks!
Haha, but the bad thing is that I don't want to post to FFN cause I don't want to have to think about what a million reviews say cause they might take me out of my mood. Hmmm...
| Title: In Which Bad Choices Are Made
| 24 Jan 2005 6:25 pm
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This was great! I don't know what you still need to change, but I loved it! I'm so glad Harry finally tried to get his wand back, even though he wasn't sucessful. That confrontation with Snape was marvelous! "Tan your hide", I lol so hard at that. That would be funny if Snape really did that. Poor Harry, couldn't even eat his favorite cereal. Can't wait to see how occlumency lessons go.
Author's Response: Thank you thank you! Are you the same Carrie on my group? Thanks so much for the multiple reviews. :)
Yeah, I know that the chapter is ok but I am just a perfectionist and I can't help thinking that everything has some big fatal mistake because I put the wrong twist of emotion here or Harry is too crybabyish here, ect ect. Haha why was the "tan your hide" line funny? If I were Harry I would be terrified! I actually hope that Harry doesn't try to go through Snape's room again because Snape doesn't seem the type to give empty threats. And Snape is just a git- taking Harry's cereal away! Rah!!! (Haha I can't wait until Snape tries some later on...)
IIRC, you don't like writing Snape. I don't know why, though, because you seem to be pretty good at it. ;-) I liked this chapter--especially the dragon, and Harry's first indications (to Snape and Hoppity) of his neglect by the Dursleys.
Sorry, but I'm not going to be able to finish tonight. I need to sleep. Hopefully, I'll be able to finish reading in the morning! :-) FINISH THE CHAPTER! *smiles angelically*
Author's Response: Oh thanks. Snape can be entertaining to write but it's just so annoying to me to watch after all his thoughts and motivations when the things in the scene continue.
Don't you bat your eyelashes and smile at me! :P I was stuck here last night by myself on this stupid chapter. I posted it. I hope you're happy. XP *bop!* :)
Ooh.. like I said in my last review, it's so much nicer seeing things through child-like eyes! :-) I have flown soo many times now that I am bored stiff. I could recite the whole thing to you, but I no longer think about how odd it is that the seats are flotation devices or think (much) about stepping over that annoying gap between the terminal arm and the plane itself. Much more fun to see it from Harry's perspective, like it's fun to listen to little kids when it's their first time and they actually make comments about things. :-D Moving on the next chapter, happily. :-)
Author's Response: You know what's really funny? All Harry's thoughts are stuff that I thought about. I get really silly on planes, or maybe it's my brother making me silly? Whenever we are together and doing anything new we just get... silly! And so childish. It's probably just my over active imagination and good memory but it was really easy to put what a child would think of when they go on a plane for the first time.
LOL, the little piece of your conversation with Star at the end of the chapter was amusing. ;-)
By the way, have I mentioned how I love the look of the site? It's SOO much easier to read things here than it is on FF.net--better font (I think, or so it seems), better background, easier on the eyes.. I'm a happy reader! Combine that with a great story (MUGGLEVILLE!) and life is very, very good. Now if only my aunt and uncle would get home.. ;-)
Poor Harry. The wand being taken away was a severe blow, worsened by it being given to Snape. I think it was a "good" choice by Dumbledore to not tell Harry that Snape was going to be his "father" for the duration--he would most certainly have refused, vocally. However, as it is, Harry's going to be rather angry at Dumbledore, I'd wager. Or maybe you're going to work it out so he's not.. I guess I'll have to read on to see!
Author's Response: YAY! YOU LOVE MY SITE! YAAAAAYYY!!!!! And you can pick what background you want too by picking a different layout. The font is Times New Roman... I think. *sings her life is good song* La la la laaaaa... I just love a little angry Harry in the morning...
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